You have a way of writing that just draws me in, you know that? I couldn't turn my eyes from the page while I was reading your story. I was just too curious to find out all the questions I was asking myself. I wanted to know why Brian was acting so hostile towards Vicki, and I wanted to know why Zacky was being so quiet and shy-like. I think the way you had Zacky basically confess his love to Vicki in the end was a great way to end the story and tie everything together. Usually people fail to do that successful, but it's obvious you've been writing for a lot longer than most people or you just have raw talent because you did so amazingly.
I couldn't turn my eyes from the page while I was reading your story. I was just too curious to find out all the questions I was asking myself. I wanted to know why Brian was acting so hostile towards Vicki, and I wanted to know why Zacky was being so quiet and shy-like.
I think the way you had Zacky basically confess his love to Vicki in the end was a great way to end the story and tie everything together.
Usually people fail to do that successful, but it's obvious you've been writing for a lot longer than most people or you just have raw talent because you did so amazingly.
Thank you for entering, and good luck :)