Mm... It was short and simple, for starters. It was clear and straight to the point.
The part after the flashback was somewhat grammatically incorrect. You jumped from past tense to present tense; it's easy to make mistakes like that, so be careful.
On another note... Very short. And it didn't come out as well as it could of. But oh well. It's "could have", not "could of"; a common mistake you should try to avoid.
Other than that, punctuation, paragraphing and spelling were all fine. ^^ Oh, and just in case you didn't know, "grey" is the UK spelling of "gray" (the US spelling). So since you're from the US, you probably should stick to "gray"? :/
The part after the flashback was somewhat grammatically incorrect. You jumped from past tense to present tense; it's easy to make mistakes like that, so be careful.
On another note...
Very short. And it didn't come out as well as it could of. But oh well.
It's "could have", not "could of"; a common mistake you should try to avoid.
Other than that, punctuation, paragraphing and spelling were all fine. ^^ Oh, and just in case you didn't know, "grey" is the UK spelling of "gray" (the US spelling). So since you're from the US, you probably should stick to "gray"? :/
All in all, good job. :]