The Blooming Wallflower - Comments

I used to be a massive fan of the Jonas Brothers back in the day, so it's nice to read about someone that I know about! You've got a fairly well-rounded drabble here, but it does seem a little unrealistic when she starts crying when he leaves. It all just seems a little too quick for them to be that invested in each other. Aside from that though, your description is lovely. The picture that you've painted is really clear and vivid, and I enjoyed reading through this.

I'll be announcing the winners of the contest later on tonight, so good luck!

So comment swap brought me here. There were a few grammar mistakes and places where you had commas that didn't need it. Overall it was a bit rushed. I just can't see someone as well known as Kevin going and spilling his guts to some stranger. And at the end when she starts crying and says that she'll miss him, it just doesn't seem real, like it's kind of fake.

But that's just my opinion.

I think it was sort of rushed. He meets her. She already wants to spill her life to him. He has to leave. She starts crying. It seemed a little unrealistic.

On the other hand, you have a good way of describing things. I could see what was happening and while it was a little far fetched, it was very cute!

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I really liked this one shot!
It was very cute and involved a truly romantic place.
Very nice I think :]