Blood Brothers - Comments

Holy Franking-Gerard, this story is AMAZING!!
I just read threw all the chapters - even tho I had stupid destractions from family which made me take a hour to read a 4 chapter story so far *clears throat*
ANYWAY, you're writing is... GEEs, I can't even find a word.
If I said amazing, that would definitly be an understatement.
For one, you NEED to keep adding to this story... or... or.. I'LL CRY!!!
This is the best/ most descriptive/ mysterious story I have read so far.
I'm about to subscribe in a minute so I know when you're updating.
Please, please, please keep up the great work.
I'll take notice of your other stories aswell.

Woah, now I know where this is going. Soon, I shall make a banner. Promise.

That was such a motherfucking great chapter. There’s a pact been sealed; there’s a deal been born. The last words/sentence has got to stand out for me, and I love that.

Grammer, character connection, and story flow superb as always. I've said it before and I'll say it again, I'm so excited about upcoming chapters.

This is really, really good. I would love to read more soon. It is so cool.

-sigh-
It's amazing. As always. Y'know you're my fovourite author on here, right? I wish I could write like you do...

I'll try for a banner after this story takes form a little more. I love this story, and I love you XD

Oh, and if you have any time, could you check out some of my stories? Vampires Will Always Hurt yoiu seems to be a big hit with my readers =D

Lots of love, xoxo'
Hayley

I really enjoyed that chapter.

Maybe is was the fact that I loved the scene, the way it just seem to swift through with no flaws and fantastic choice of words. Or maybe it's just because it's Mrs Way and Mrs Iero conversing. Gotta love rock star parents.

I bet it IS bad luck... editing... I was actually thinking about looking in to becoming an editor. Loved it, just like I always do. Mrs. Iero seems hard to gauge this early... I mean, she doesn't seem horrible, but she does seem dismissive sometimes... And Ms Way seems as strong as ever. I mean, she's a strong woman, and that just shows. Mrs. Iero has no children... hm...

*shuts lap top closed*

this is hopeless. im trying to read but i get TOO MANY distractions. kiddies and parents in law... *emo sigh*

ill read tonight.

HORSIE! I again, feel incredibly bad for Mrs. Way. Even though she is a little perkier this chapter; She's still gossiped about.

Only your stories can pull my hearstrings. -dabs tears-
I need to re-read this chapter again.

*subscribes* really great story im hooked already, keep writing :)

First off; SEVEN KIDS?! In one apartment?! My God, where do you get your ideas for these stories?! I'm hooked already, and it's just the intro.
Your style of writing is phenomonal. Should you ever stop, I'd have to thwack you with an airplane just like you thwacked me for Silent Boy. x]
I can't wait to see where this one goes. Seriously.

-is now subscribed to this pwnful piece of art-

i love this so far!
i love your style of writing

great detail, grat character interaction too! at first, the woman said her name was "Bob" i was kinda shocked. It's humbling so far, and it reminds me of a charles dickens novel. i like it

I've never seen the movie... you know your writing always astounds me. It's so honest... I really like how these first two chapters are told from an outside perspective... I don't know what perspective(s) you'll use (or if you'll stay with this one), but so far you just write it so well. The details just make it. The husband sounds like an ass, but I'm betting you won't focus on him, that's not what the story's about... the story's about Mrs. Way and her children. *hugs you* Aaaah, you're so talented. Oh, and yeah, I too loved that little thing how Eliza and Gerard are siblings... XD
Bottom line, NINJA BOB OWNS YOUR FACE! (and I'm subscribing to this story)

so when do we get to meet the husband? Before you paint him as an A)*&(T please remember most of these situations are caused by the woman.

EXTREMELY great chapter for such a tourmented child, horsie!

And yes, GERARD AND ELIZA ARE SIBLINGS? AHH! xD

Please write more.

*pokes*

I don't have much to say because I still don't know where are you going with this.

Oh yes, I do have one thing to say:

HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA Eliza & Gerard siblings WTFRANK

OK. I'm done.

craigloe:

Very nice, you do such a great job of letting out just enough detail without boaring the reader; understading we all know what it feels like to meet someone for the first time and the tension so you don't have to tell us about bob's sweat and nervious twitch or he spilt his coffee on his pants.

Bob is way too much of a ninja to do anything that silly. Besides, he drank it all; he never spilled it. Just so you all know.

Very nice, you do such a great job of letting out just enough detail without boaring the reader; understading we all know what it feels like to meet someone for the first time and the tension so you don't have to tell us about bob's sweat and nervious twitch or he spilt his coffee on his pants.

".......I saw someone up ahead, a darker mass among the night’s muted colors. I knew at once that it was a person, and from the slow, deliberate pace, I could tell who it was. The same woman who always walked these streets at this hour, much like me. We always passed each other in the same place, steps becoming even as we traveled past that same bar full of happy drunks who would likely be feeling the sharp effects of their alcohol the next day, but for the moment were in another world entirely, one without pain. "

I can't believe I didn't see this earlier. Horsie, out of all your stories, this by far is my favorite. Your writing is brilliant - it flows beautifully. That's really all I have to say; Expect more of me in the future. xD