Remember - Comments

It's such a sweet story, full of angelic wonder.
The picture painted in my head is bright and white with little flecks of color here and there,
and it's just beautiful. Your words are so beautiful.

I really liked this story, very sweet, short and romantic. The second person narration really worked here and I think that’s pretty rare, at least from what I’ve seen in other stories. I really liked the first lines of each part – especially the rhyming and how descriptive you were throughout, very detailed and easy to imagine the scenes and emotions of the two characters and a lot of the ways you worded things had a really nice flow. This is a great idea for a story and I hope that you continue with it. I think it would be pretty neat to see each chapter as a different month with twelve chapters in all, starting with the first month and ending with the last but either way I think you’ve got something great.

This was beautiful, you're really great at describing things.
I could picture it perfectly as if I were a car driving by the couple on the road.
It's just,

no ending needed. just as it is. it's a memory, in a sense. memories dont end.

Story/Review Game;

First I would like to say that I'm very proud I got to be the first comment for this story :]

The first sentence put me in remind of V for Vendetta, which I liked a lot. That sentence sounded so sad alone, and held much power and emotion. This is the first time I've read a second person narrative on mibba, and to say the least...I'm kind of impressed.

I like that you're talking to me, telling a story with a lot of meaning. There isn't much, but everything seems to be based on knowledge and perspective. There's so many situations I could think for this, like a safe memory that is being said when you think of someone who has passed. It's beautifully said in so little words, and that's what I liked the most. Snow and love go well together, so I thought that worked out perfectly, but it was a little odd to me, because I've never witnessed snow in November? Maybe, but I've never seen it.

"That morning we woke up, and the window was filled with snow; we couldn't eat breakfast fast enough.."- this left a good picture in my mind about their age. And towards the end the narrator said they acted like three year olds, and maybe it was because they saw snow in November :tehe: but the characters action were real and natural, snow makes people not act there age.

This was very cute, and softly romantic in some ways. Its confusing, beautifully written, but we just don't know what's going on, who these people are, and why their doing this, but it's nice and you really make your readers use their imagination :]

Good job.