It Ain't Easy - Comments

This was so lovely. Just as few people above already said, I love how you made a story about them having a baby, and yet it wasn't the story about the baby, but about them, how they were dealing with the baby, with the whole situation and... I can actually see pretty well Kitten trying so hard to be a "perfect mum". Like, everyone thinks he is the self-centered, self-loving immature prick (well, okay, but we love him anyway? xD) and I can see him try all too hard to prove everyone wrong, to prove people that he is a good parent.

Eric sank down on the chair, pressing his hands hard against his face as salty tears was falling down his cheeks, his shoulder shaking. Ahh Kitten.

I just wanna quote the whole thing that shows how desperate to be perfect Kitten is, because I love how perfectly the emotion is written in there.

He had seen the same conclusion in Eric's expression when the child were laid in his arms. The boy's eyes had been round, glittering brightly as the baby for a few seconds opened his eyes, looking directly on the youngest of his fathers - none of them cared about that the nurse told them that babies couldn't see that long when being nearly newborn. This is such a sweet mental image. It just makes me melt... and you are actually making me think of Cat as a good father. Ooh scary thoughts.

"I'm an awful parent," he whispered, meaning what he said. He were fully convinced that there hadn't been any parents worse than him. Awww Kitten, you're not. Just no.

Eric suddenly let out a low giggle, his eyes glittering as looking up at Andreas. "Ever heard of someone managing with relaxing when having a baby?" Hahaha, this was such a cute part at the end. I love it so much.

And I love this fiction so much as well, just as I love you so much too. <333

Okay, I'm here to review the story!

Eric sank down on the chair, pressing his hands hard against his face as salty tears was falling down his cheeks, his shoulder shaking.
That was an amazing first sentence. The pressing his hands hard against his face part was something I really liked. [:

He had never believed for it to be easy, but he didn't seem to do anything right, only making mistakes over and over again, and it filled him with despair and agony. The first week had been easy, having had full hopes that he would manage with learning it soon, that he would be great on it, but after one month, it got clear that he was simply useless on it.
I absolutely adore your word choice and the way you phrased things in that paragraph.

Eric yelled, starting to cry again as hearing a increasing cry from the baby chamber.
That sentence was slightly awkward for me to read.
Maybe if you re-phrased it, it'd flow easier.

The screaming faded away almost immediately as feeling human warmth, the small hannds moving slightly as if trying to reach for the one holding him. Andreas smiled softly as looking down at the baby, holding him close to his body as he hummed some old lullaby.
Aside from a few grammatical errors, this paragraph was really lovely.
I could really picture Andreas smiling at the baby and humming softly to it.

he boy's eyes had been round, glittering brightly as the baby for a few seconds opened his eyes, looking directly on the youngest of his fathers - none of them cared about that the nurse told them that babies couldn't see that long when being nearly newborn.
That made me smile so much.

The way the dialogue flows is really nice.

The hair felt so soft, almost tickling his fingertips, and he smiled a bit wider.
I smiled reading that sentence

a sheepish smile playing over his lips.
Lovely word choice and phrasing again

Overall, it was a really nice one-shot. I liked how a large part of this was the way Eric's and Andreas's relationship works, but the baby was still a major part of the plot and all that. There was some grammar issues, but aside from that I really enjoyed this. [:

One Shot For One Shot

Eric sank down on the chair, pressing his hands hard against his face as salty tears was falling down his cheeks, his shoulder shaking.
I'm immediately interested.
I want to know sooo bad what's got Eric upset. This is the perfect way to introduce a story to all those nose bags like myself ;)

...knowing that she would adopt it way anyway..
That sentence doesn't make much sense to me. Perhaps something like, "knowing that she would place the child up for adoption anyway.."
It's just the last two words that don't mesh for me.

...sign that he had bee crying..
I have a feeling this should probably be "been".

You could almost touch the love Eric had for him, it was that obvious.
As nice as it was - I don't think this really had the effect of expressing their love you were going for. It was just a little... oddly put? I guess.

Overall, this was actually really nice. Usually whenever you follow a story that has a baby, the baby is always the main focus - and while the baby played a large part of this plot line - the relationship between Eric and Andreas was also huge.
I really like that you wrote this about a same sex couple. It's not done too often and originality is always nice to see.

Nice job.

Aaaw, it's so cute. Usually, when people write stories with babies in them, it turns out horrible. But this, it was beautiful. You didn't focus SOLELY on the babe and you could just feel the love coming from the couple for each other and the baby.

The passion was wonderfully written. <333 This was amazing.

N'awwwwwwwwwwwwwww.

Just warning you now, this comment is likely to be quite incoherent.

First and foremost, I wanna hug Kitten. He needs a hug. I feel kinda sorry for him. thinking he's fucking everything up.

Andy is so adorable/epic/etc. I wanna hug him too. I love this side of him, I admit it.

AND A KIDDIE. Ohlord. They need to have kiddies irl. End of. It would be so cute.

Gah. I am aware how incoherent this is but I am a fudgewumbling mess of squee-bubbles. I apologize now because this comment so does not do this any justice.

AWWW.
That was onesy was adorable.
I was a puddle the whole time.
The baby seems adorable, and I loved the way you described their relatonship.
It was lovely all together, and perked me up a little.