Lust - Comments

I'm here from comment swap. I dislike what the story is about, I don't like sex stories. But i thought your writhg was good, there are no spelling mistakes that i could see or grammar. But i couldn't connect to a story like i normally would. I couldn't connect with the character...i dislike both. But like i said your writing is good.

I really liked this. This was short, sweet and sexy. Your writing was beautiful and matched the tone you were creating perfectly. I adore this women because she's unlike any female character I've read before. She's wild, bossy and sassy. She's an adult female that knows what she wants and went after it, no matter the end results of the situation. I wish you described the sex scene they had, but I think there was a point of making it short because even the female narrator said so.

But what I liked the most was how there were no names. I felt like I was a fly on the wall and I was catching a glimpse of their love for a brief moment. There were more to these characters that we didn't see, but like I said there was a point to it starting and ending so fast. There was something about this guy that she loved, and they didn't even know each other that long, but she gave herself to him because she was infatuated with him because the little details, like him being married, she didn't know that...every woman who is interested in a guy that would be the first question they would ask, but not her.

She was wild and free and didn't give two shits what people thought, she got what she wanted and I actually respect her for that because she went about the situation as an adult and a woman in general about handling something as far as sex goes because she seemed so detached, but it worked here. I really liked it. To the point that makes me want to ask a million questions however, this was wonderful.

Wow. You did a great job on this. Captured lust perfectly. I loved it.