It was a very interesting story. Though I have some critique. The ending was a little confusing so I'm glad that you explained it in your author's note. I thought that she died or something :P I wish you would have went into more detail into the meaning of the two owls. Like how the white one represents her purity and every time it licks her wounds, a small piece of her becomes stained. You could also go into a story line where the owl becomes pure red, how her suffering has stained her being and soul beyond repair. I believe that you started with a fantastic beginning and it had so much potential. I would really like to see you rewrite this story without the word limit and just go all out with it. I think the plot line and potential are so high for this.
November 17th, 2009 at 01:32am