And Memories Fade - Comments

The name caught my eye, And this beatiful truly honey.

This is really super-I can't wait for more.
I feel as if I can really understand what the character is going through and I feel like I know how she feels. I've felt it before to some degree, but this is what I felt, intensified and put into words of another.

I feel like this today. I'm guessing that everyone has those days, but you managed to write it all out so perfectly.
I don't want to say that I really like it, because it's more than that. I connect with it.

And that's the best compliment I can give you.

I'm so glad you decided to continue running with this story.

I click the link and start to read, realizing shamefully that I can't actually remember the first chapter. So I read that one first, and it feels like I'm sitting across from Ev again and she's telling me her story.

I move on to the new chapter. And I think that the shortness of it really made it all that much better. Sometimes you don't need a whole page of words to convey so simple, yet so complex an emotion as the pain of losing someone. Especially when it was just the two of you growing apart. Sometimes it would be so much better if the relationship just ended in an explosion than having it just simmer until it fades completely.

And now I'm rambling...sorry about that.

What I mean to say is, you have a way of making my heart hurt just as much as Ev's does when she doesn't have Em anymore. I read your story and I can connect because I dislike those sleepless nights too. I spend all night trying to think up exactly what to say to that special person, and then it hits me: I no longer have that special person to talk to .

And then all I have left are those sleepless nights.

Sorry for rambling,
Fink

It's very clear, very thought out. As Castaway said, you can just picture the narrator sitting there and thinking.

And the truth is, I am Em. I am that girl who was so painfully human, but not even close to beautiful. I am that girl with the extra pounds, the extra baggage. But I am that girl that someone somehow found me beautiful anyway.

The feeling of loss is...so easy to grab onto, and then you just hold it with you for the rest of the story. It hits you right off the bat, and you can just feel the sadness of losing Em. You can literally feel the regret.

I'm thinking that this is your new one-shot. If it's not, then I'm a dumbass. Hit me over the head with a refrigerator. Tell me, stupid stupid Fink, you read the wrong one. But if this is the new one-shot, then let me say that it was beautiful in its simplicity. As for continuing with it, I think that would be brilliant. I think it has the potential to turn into something very note-worthy.

Promised I'd read,
Fink

Excellent!! it's really a sad story at the same time, but you can so clearly picture her sitting and thinking about this years later like it's just one of the times the whole story has rolled through her head and you're giving us that instant. really great!!!!!!!!

PS: I rather enjoy how you write "AND relish..." you're just such a rebel eh?

Aw, thank you. I really enjoyed writing this one. I would love to continue, but you might be waiting for a while since I really don't know where it's going, and I'm definitely not going to force something. Sooo... I'll keep it in mind, but don't hold your breath ;D

-checking ot out-

Awwwww....I love stories like this. They leave you with this thoughtful kind of feeling. I think that you should continue. You wrote it in past tense, why not take it from there. Explain how they met more, or why the first chapter is talking as if looking back on the memories regretfully.
I'd really like to see more.