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Drabble for Drabble

As a few people mentioned already, that line about the color of trust is seriously genious. I mean, like Woah. That's pretty powerful.

I liked this story though. I thought it was very interestingly written. I liked the "unsureness" of it all. The way the narrator wanted to help, but wasn't sure how to do so was really nice, and the way it ended really tied everything together.

Is this a oneshot or a drabble? 'Cause it was posted in the drabble thread but apparently the oneshot thread as well. Can only be one or the other.

Anyways, Drabble for Drabble

I'm not sure how someone can have a look of dismay on their lips but you've made it sound right, you made it fit. Which is good talent to have.
I like how you describe the person's bones as scaffolding. It's brilliant.

Also it's beautiful how you made trust a color. "The color of trust," Just yeah, I would've never thought of trust being described like that.

oneshot for oneshot.
the colour of trust draining from your porcelain skin
favorite line fuckin' ever. there's just something about it that makes it absolutely gorgeous.

i love the flow this has and the way you describe things amazes me.

this whole piece is incredible.

your second person makes me jealous, btw.

One Shot For One Shot:

This was so beautiful. So moving. I absolutely loved this.

I loved the style in which this piece was written - I cannot sing enough praises about it. I really did love it. Wonderful job on this.

♥

One Shot for One Shot

The first thought that came into my head was that it'd be good, because I've had people rec. your stories to me, and I wasn't disappointed; it was amazing. The banner was simply beautiful, and I don't know if you took/edited the photo yourself, but I love it. The summary is perfect too.

I really loved the way you've written it, using you. It really makes you believe in the story, that it's you. The descriptions are just amazing, and it all flows so well, for such a short piece of work. I can't pick a particular line I loved, as everyone was amazing in it's own unique way.

There are few authors that can pull of this style and topic, and you did it perfectly.

That was breathtaking.
My god, there are so many people that write tragedies, and I must say,
you are one of the few who are able to pull it off.

The words are so beautiful and the writing has that aura of dread, almost. I can seriously hear the thrum of the author's heart as they find out what's happened and it's so...sad. (for lack of better word).

You made this so real and lovely.

The pale skin covering your broken scaffolding is sliced with hatred and resent to the world you live in.

Is such an amazing line. I'm going to have to check out your other work, because this is amazing.
Great job!

That was beautiful.
Definitely one of the most articulate expressions of emotion I've ever read.

i loved it... mind you all your writing is good! XD

One Shot For One Shot.

Oh dear. That was absolutely wonderful.
The words just flowed beautifully into one another and the imagery was just worthy.
A lot of people write about this sore subject, and don't really capture the emotion.
But your's was different, the emotion was really there and didn't end like most of them do
You have a brilliant mind, and I advise you to keep going.

P.S. I found it strange how I was listening to Say - John Mayer.

Jesus christ, that could've possibly been one of the most powerful things I've ever read, all contained within five hundred words.

You have the most amazing talent in writing emotion. I'm not even lying.

And you spoke of a tender subject, something typically overdone and wrapped in cliche, but yours wasn't. Yours was phenomenal. It was honest, it was raw, and it was brilliant.

Well done.

That. Was. WONDROUS.
It was absolutely amazing. So simple, yet oh so intricate.
It makes me think about my cousin. She had a problem with self-harm. I've yet to talk to her about it, but your one shot has inspired me to.

Vee, that was amazing.
Why didn't you tell me you posted this?!
The words flowed together perfectly.
The imagery was so damn amazing, absolutely beautiful.
The emotion was so real, it was so sad, but I loved it.
You are too talented m'love

::inlove

I loved it, it was amazingly written.