Bulletproof. - Comments

I love the way you write <3

Loved it. All the little details.

Ally x

Wow, this was actually really good. I'm glad that you wrote this, it seems like maaaybe you might be getting back into the swing of things? I hope so, because it's damn good. It all flowed so nicely and i really like that it was addressing "you" and not "he". That might be 2nd person? Yeah. Probably. Bad at English XD

The image of Jamie at the start is such a sad one, how he hasn't slept, how he's been neglecting himself to wallow in the shit state that Lee left him in. I like how hopeful the story gets though. The sense of strength that Jamie gets when he realises that Lee is no better than him, he's far worst, he's horrible in fact. He has nothing which Jamie needs, and now that he's done this, not even anything that he wants. While Lee will probably stay the same, having nothing better to do than fuck around with people's feelings, Jamie's just gonna get on with things.

The description of Lee is a good one though. How he seems like he can be sweet, or at least act it when he's hiding behind and innocent facade, but when you get down to it he seems pretty lazy and is only focused on manipulating and fucking people. He's very two faced and wants way more than he can have. He had Jamie, yet went off with Ian and Sean as well, and Jamie reckons that now this is over he'll try his best to not only win the hearts of others, but maybe even his own back. Ah dear.

Jamie's lovely though. He's taken so many knocks but he's pulling through it and realising that his friends, Stu at least, are gonna be there for him. He can forget about Lee and everything he's done to him and be stronger.

Yeah, this was very good. I'd comment more on your writing style, but i don't think it'd be any different to what I've said before. It seems more...mature and in depth though. It focuses a little more on the actions, but keeping the emotions there as well so there's a good balance which creates a better image of Jamie as he stumbles about his room.

Well done xx

You write really well.
I was actually listening to that song when I clicked on your story.
I love ironies.