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Oh my god, Zoe! Why did you never tell me you'd posted this?! It's fucking fantastic. I'm ashamed to say that I always forget how amazing your writing is, but it really is epic.

I adored Ian, he was absolutly...just...a wreck and you could tell it. I just wanted to make Jamie burst in and hug him all the time, you wrote the desperation Ian goes through really well and as a reader I could feel that and tell how much he just wanted to make it right. Poor thing >.<

I'm glad Jamie didn't leave him, it just shows how much he realized that Ian was doing this for both of them, trying to help as much as he could and doing the unspeakable - literally, I like how you didn't even put the actual sex in but described how it made Ian feel. Ian needed Jamie so much, and I'm really glad he was actually their for him. I think it'd be far too heartbreaking if he wasn't.

Andy... well. Andy was a twat. I liked the hockey stick idea, how he carried it around and Ian never saw him without it. It's like a signature prop. I just like little things like that. How he used Ian's utter devotion to Jamie against him proved what a manipulative guy he was.

Seriously, epic work.

xx

Aww wow, this is really good!
<3

OMG.



You're always making Ian get hurt! The poor thing! Haha, i'm just kidding. I mean, i think you're forgiven, as it's fiction...

He was a real sweetie in this. Ian in this was one of those people who comes across as really together and really strong- rather like real Ian but you know, at the end of the day, he's only human. He's a real person. And one person can only stand so much. There's a fine line between strong/brave and ridiculous. Ian manages to teeter over into ridiculous here. He tries so hard not to put the pressure on jamie and it's so sweet how he's all protective in his head. Like, when Andy was threatening the idea of Jamie and it's like a big red flashing "NO" siren goes off in Ian's head. he loves jamie so much.

It was all really good. I like how the introducing sentence of Andy is That's when Andy came to the rescue. I just kind of knew from a description like that that he'd be too good to be true, and that he'd turn out as the bad guy somehow. I like that you didn't describe the stuff Ian had done to him as a hooker too graphically... and also that you didn't actually use the word "prostitute" or "hooker" or anything, I think it was better that way.

Jamie was just lovely at the end/the start. You could really feel Ian's relief and i'm so glad Jamie didn't get angry with him for it.

I've decided inside my head that Andy died being mauled by tigers. And Jamie won the lottery the next day.

I feel so sorry for Ian and Jamie :(

This was very interesting to read.
Not only have I never read a Lostphrophets fan fiction before but I've never seen a LP slash either.
I really enjoyed the way you wrote it and well, it was just so sad and full of emotion.

Great job =D