Irony - Comments

First of all,
I liked how you used a premade layout which fits with the story nicely. The story's title and the quote in the summary, "...I must be cruel, only to be kind..." work nicely together and I'm wondering about the irony in this piece.

Now, on to the actual chapter.
I liked the first half of the story (the first two paragraphs and his words). The details made the scene unfold in my mind and I've been in that situation before so I can relate to it. The third paragraph where she speaks and her moves are a bit overdramatic. It all depends on if that was what you were going for. As for the last paragraph, it made the drabble seem like the beggining of a story than just a stand alone.

-Marian.

wow... a bit dramitic with the punching the ground thing.
i don't remember you telling me about this new story... hmm.... maybe you did...
i'm not sure anymore....

I liked it {:
I thought it was good!