:D I absolutely love this story! The plot is so fun and interesting all at the same time. I can't wait to find out why Neely doesn't talk to anyone anymore. The detail was amazing, as well. [& it made me hungry for a poboy sandwich... and some red beans and rice XD] Bayou Town truly does sound like the south. Are you from down there? [if you're not, then you did some good research!]
I <3 your stories! I agree 100% with the comment before me! I love your similies, the detail you put into the setting and surroundings, the way you've build your characters. You've made us curious with this Neely girl, his family's response and just everything that's going to happen while Nick's there and I'm excited to see where this goes!
OBVIOUSLY, you have been listening to a lot of Dave Matthews Band or eating fish. I don't know, whichever one, do not stop. I am already confused to the mystery you've set up, but I know I'm going to love it. You've made every character so rich and entertaining already. Cannot wait to get more into this story.