I think I can see how it relates to the soung; and it's interesting how you did it. I liked the concept of the story; and how it got to the point; and didn't linger on anything that wasn't important. Criticism; I think you may need to read through it again, slowly, and see the tense errors. In some places it works; and in others...not so much. But other than that, I thought it was good, you linked it to the song in a subtle way. You did well. :]
I liked the concept of the story; and how it got to the point; and didn't linger on anything that wasn't important.
Criticism; I think you may need to read through it again, slowly, and see the tense errors. In some places it works; and in others...not so much.
But other than that, I thought it was good, you linked it to the song in a subtle way. You did well. :]