The very first line, ”Who would ever write for fun?” sort of confused me. You didn’t really say who said this line. It took me a little bit to figure that you weren’t the one to say it.
I loved the description you used in this. The imagery painted a picture in my mind, while keeping things a mystery.
For my, the mystery of this was what you were writing about in the end, on the computer. That is what I liked about this. You kept the one-shot interesting without telling what happened and everything. I loved the beginning, middle and ending of this.
You hardly had any grammar mistakes but I saw a few. There weren’t any spelling mistakes, kudo’s to you. Very nice writing!
I loved the description you used in this. The imagery painted a picture in my mind, while keeping things a mystery.
For my, the mystery of this was what you were writing about in the end, on the computer. That is what I liked about this. You kept the one-shot interesting without telling what happened and everything. I loved the beginning, middle and ending of this.
You hardly had any grammar mistakes but I saw a few. There weren’t any spelling mistakes, kudo’s to you. Very nice writing!