April 18th, 2010 at 08:19pm
This is probably my shortest comment to date, and I wish I could write more but...
I really loved the new chapter; it had so much more back-story to everything that is happening. I think you have so much going for this story that it is possibly the unique, most eccentric story written.
The line I found most compelling is these: She had been killed while Rumor’s father had still been young, and had yet to be reincarnated. He was prepared, though. There’s just something about the way you suggested that ‘he was prepared’.
I reallyyy loved this chapter. It explained so much. I think I kind of have an idea of what's going to happen (if it continues, that is). Ahh, yeah, it really explains a lot.
In a dark, cold room, two bloodied eyes shone.
I love how you started this chapter out -- all dark and mysterious. I immediately knew it was going to be in a different setting/point of view.
The heavy sound of deep breathing accompanied the loud beating of the king’s heart. His horns were thick and twisted, like the gnarled roots of a bone tree. The coarse black fur that grew on his head tapered off at the nape of his neck, becoming a single line of hair down his spine. His bovine snout was pink and moist. He gnashed his teeth inside his mouth, tasting the very old vegetable he was chewing.
What a freaky king, hahaa. O_O
King Rumor, that's definitely an interesting name for a king. I'm sure there's a reason. And um, I definitely despise him for what he did. I can only imagine what he's done in Wonder.
Ahh, gosh I loved thiss.