Comfort - Comments

That was cute. You used good words to describe the mood. However, the plot was a little cliche. It was nice, though. You construct your sentences very nicely, it reminds me a bit of Hemingway. Well done.

Damn, this made me want a cigarette, too. :P

Nice imagery.
I can really feel the emotions between the characters and try and imagine their past together.
The whole piece as a one shot is really nice and related well to the photo.

In the summary I noticed you wrote,"she wiped ferociously at her cheeks".
I have not heard of "ferociously" being used that way and maybe I'm wrong but it would be better if you switched it with "furiously."
Sorry.In the chapter:
“I will never be able to not to care about you.”
This line didn't seem to make sense to me.I am sorry if I'm wrong but I think it would be better if you changed it by dropping the second "to" or make the sentence say,
"I will never be able to stop caring about you."
Just a thought.Sorry.Otherwise it's exceptionally well written,emotions were expressed wonderfully.
It was a pleasure to read this story :)
<3

The protagonist seems a little all over the place with her feelings towards this man. I understand if this is meant to be the case, but it then isn't quite obvious enough for me to be sure, (or maybe I'm just not getting it?). She seems to be blaming herself for being unloveable, but also him for not loving her when she wanted him too, and regretting how vulnerable she made herself while thinking that she may not have been vulnerable at all. If that made any sense then kudos to you. =) Your story is genuinely interesting and well pieced, making it a pleasure to read.

haha, after reading your journal, I attacked your story and so far, I don't see anything wrong with it. Keep going!!!! Don't loose sight of the character =P