Seldom Seen Kid - Comments

This is kind of confusing, and I had to read it over a couple times to 'get it', haha.
But it's very interesting. I love these sort of futuristic stories; they are so engaging. I adore your main character's voice; reminds me of Holden Caulfield.

There are a few capitalising mistakes, but besides that, amazing job (:

One Shot for A One Shot

This was... Random.
I get what he was trying to say in here. I can imagine it, even throughout all the rambling.

What does my existence prove anyway? That they are fallible? But, I am nothing and no more. No, wait, less than that. A would-be man, but no more than that. I am no more of a man than I am atoms or chemicals or neurons. I am a nothing man. A nobody boy. Just a fucking corpse, doing what i need to. This part was simply divine. I love the detail and I seriously get what he's saying.

I think I saw some grammer mistakes, but maybe I didn't
You're such a great writer! Keep it up!

This is honestly some of the best stuff I've read on Mibba. Sure, the style is rambling, but it's an eloquent, intelligent, contextualised kind of rambling.

Horseman's wet dream.

Nice. I also loved the improvised words.

There were a few odd capital letters missing -typos, probably- but overall, very nice work. There's enough detail in your ideas that it's almost a shame you didn't extend it and explore them further. I suppose though that you said what you needed to say, and really, all good short stories will leave the reader wanting more than just a glimpse.

I think kudos are in order. ^^

This is a very interesting piece.

I will admit I was a bit confused since you just threw me into a new world, time frame, ect and didn't give me too much to know the characters by.

But it was definatly an interesting concept from what I got from it - poets and creative people being killed because they would question authority. I would have never thought of something like that.

You are certainly a very origional writer and, on a somewhat unrelated note, I'm really looking forward to what you're going to write for my contest.