Caged - Comments

I love it! The characters, the plot, the beauty! You've really amazed me.

And you kind of win the contest by default, since no one else entered. But I think you would have still won if more people entered; this is really a magnificent piece. You caught my heart at the beginning, which is always a toughie for me, and you even kept me reading till the end. Impressive job, I adore it.

Thank you for entering my contest! And thank you for this beautiful story. <3

:D I finally found the time to finish it.
And let me tell you I still adore the way you put out the words. You weave so carefully and with such distinction for each character. I specially loved this part:

"I was the falcon. I opened my sharpened eyes, my clothes and mask strewn around me. I cawed, and flapped my wings, flying out the opened screen door. I flew over the neighborhood, looking for the welcome sign."

Although it did leave me wanting more. XD We all sound so needy wanting a full blown story.
But it's true. Can't say we didn't obsess completely over this story. It's just so homey. :D It made everything seem so much more real.

Amazing job. Like always, Terra. :3

Tara, you really outdid yourself with this one. I felt like I was a part of the story even though I was just reading it, and to me, that makes a story memorable in the best way. Overall, it was so well written and perfectly descriptive. I wasn't overwhelmed with fluffy, unnecessary words that just cluttered the page. You actually said something in each sentence; each had a purpose.

Also, the characters were each distinct and familiar. They weren't so unbelievable and nonsensical that I couldn't see them as real; they actually seemed normal, like you could just meet one of them at the mall or something. Another sign of a great story. :)

For a "sci-fi/fantasy" type story, it wasn't overly unrealistic. It had just enough "make believe" to make it imaginative and somewhat tangible at the same time. Stellar, stellar, stellar! (And that's coming from a girl who's not too into the scifi stuff!)

The length is actually really great, but I'd love to see it as a full blown story if you have the time. It's definitely an amazing start for one.

Wuhu!
Thanks for the notification btw.

Anyways, nicely done; though you left me wanting for more; I really felt no conclusion to the whole plot, but perhaps that's what you intended to do.

The descriptions are still as vivid as the first chapter and the characters are very tangible. I really liked the whole... 'every day-life' feeling you gave to this last chapter.

Holly effin cow, Tara... I love mutant stories and such, and I just loved how you made everything so realistic, from the government interferring with the shape-shifters' lives, to how everything started for Connor.

It's really refreshing to read something as original as this. I've honestly never read anything alike.

Your descriptions are great, and I love the animal of choice that you gave to Connor; though my personal favorite is his sister's animal

I realy want to read second part now and see how this turns out.

:D Caaaan't wait for the second part.

Sempai, this is a masterpiece! I completely love the idea of the masks, I also love the fact that the shapeshifters weren't treaten that badly. Though, I have to agree with Sam with the dialogue. That's it, though. The rest was so beautiful...

I'm a bit riddled with Connor's father's choice, but I think it was a bat, was it not?

Anywho, amazing one-shot.

First off, Tara, is merely to say that this caught my attention immediately. Not just because it was sci-fi-esque, but also because the beginning was very attention-grabbing. I especially loved this part:

An array of color was in front of me, in many different forms. Dark elegant reds; Bright, happy yellows; Deep, serene blues. All in the form of masks. Masks that told the world who the animal inside of you was.

A spirit animal, eh? I like it; the concept isn't used as often as it should be. The way you handled it, though, is beautiful.

Your descriptions are so top notch, I swear. I love your method of using colors, the way that your writing just feels so soft even though you're talking about persecution for being, well, mutants. Shapeshifters. Such a difficult thing to talk about convincingly and you got it perfectly.

The only thing I would say is that your dialogue comes off a little forced. That's really the only thing I find to be off with it. It might just be word choices that throws off the word flow, but other than that:

Tara, I love it.