Before I even touch the story: not a very original name… Cute using the dictionary entry in the beginning Explaining your feelings in only three words… two things to say about that: quite cliché, and: coincidental much? “I’m sorry Xavier, I know we have nothing in common but I can’t hate you when deep down, I know that there’s a part of me that loves you.” –Oh so genaric. I didn’t expect the ‘father of my child thing’ but even that is extemely over used. I liked the whole, carries a picture of his daughter in his wallet thing
I can’t say I loved this story. It sounded like you rushed a good story with a lot of generic lines. There wasn’t a whole lot of originality or style to this story, especially in the title, but that doesn’t count for anything but I’m just throwing it out there. I’m sorry that I don’t have a heck of a lot of great things to say about the story.. Thank you for participating in my contest.
Cute using the dictionary entry in the beginning
Explaining your feelings in only three words… two things to say about that: quite cliché, and: coincidental much?
“I’m sorry Xavier, I know we have nothing in common but I can’t hate you when deep down, I know that there’s a part of me that loves you.” –Oh so genaric. I didn’t expect the ‘father of my child thing’ but even that is extemely over used.
I liked the whole, carries a picture of his daughter in his wallet thing
I can’t say I loved this story. It sounded like you rushed a good story with a lot of generic lines. There wasn’t a whole lot of originality or style to this story, especially in the title, but that doesn’t count for anything but I’m just throwing it out there. I’m sorry that I don’t have a heck of a lot of great things to say about the story..
Thank you for participating in my contest.