March 20th, 2016 at 05:25am
Comment Swap:
I'm kind of impressed by the amount of comments you've gotten on just a prologue. How have you done this? Gotten so much attention in a short read? Man, I am going to have to add a tonne and a half of bull-spunk to even get this to count as a comment. Well... okay, we've got just a prologue. That is not much.
The formatting is nice. Visually pleasing to the eye. Good aesthetics, I have no idea how you have added the little graphic at the bottom. Impressive when working with this poorly programmed website.
It's a good start. I'm genuinly curious to know what happens, and now that i've read the whole thing i see you are re-writing the story. I really want my comment though so I'm going to stretch this out, and I apologize for wasting your time at this point.
Anyway, prologue is a little vague on the details, but I'm sure that is intentional. This is an eye grabber, and it certainly pique's interests, but as for a story, well... you need a story. What you have thus is interesting. I do fear that the rest of the story may have fallen into some 'early writer' tropes, which you've probably already picked out and that is why you're re-writing the thing. Story line is just good enough to salvage, but the writing might be cringe worthy in places. I dunno, I'm taking guesses. It's a shot in the dark.
You think I'm at two hundred characters yet? Again, I'm real sorry to be writing to you a load of junk, but here we are. You with just a prologue and me with hopes and dreams of receiving a comment. *Sighs* Here we are.
I'm kind of impressed by the amount of comments you've gotten on just a prologue. How have you done this? Gotten so much attention in a short read? Man, I am going to have to add a tonne and a half of bull-spunk to even get this to count as a comment. Well... okay, we've got just a prologue. That is not much.
The formatting is nice. Visually pleasing to the eye. Good aesthetics, I have no idea how you have added the little graphic at the bottom. Impressive when working with this poorly programmed website.
It's a good start. I'm genuinly curious to know what happens, and now that i've read the whole thing i see you are re-writing the story. I really want my comment though so I'm going to stretch this out, and I apologize for wasting your time at this point.
Anyway, prologue is a little vague on the details, but I'm sure that is intentional. This is an eye grabber, and it certainly pique's interests, but as for a story, well... you need a story. What you have thus is interesting. I do fear that the rest of the story may have fallen into some 'early writer' tropes, which you've probably already picked out and that is why you're re-writing the thing. Story line is just good enough to salvage, but the writing might be cringe worthy in places. I dunno, I'm taking guesses. It's a shot in the dark.
You think I'm at two hundred characters yet? Again, I'm real sorry to be writing to you a load of junk, but here we are. You with just a prologue and me with hopes and dreams of receiving a comment. *Sighs* Here we are.