Sobriquet - Comments

Likey likey.

Well done!!!

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She was nineteen with outrageously messy, long, golden hair, mossy, large blue eyes, pale, baby skin, cherry lips, barely five feet in height, body merely covered by a loose grey sweater that skid off her shoulders. The sleeves were too long for her, covering majority of her long fingers, showing the tips of bitten nails. Around her neck hung a long golden chain which held together a flower made of gold. Her legs were long, bruises and cuts all over, just as the bottom of her feet were painful to even look at. [/quotes]
I'm a sucker for this type of character description.

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I stopped shaking her, shifting my left hand and placing it on top of her recently bandaged right eye. Her lips were cracked and her skin looked pale. She didn’t speak. She didn’t even look at me with her good eye. I caressed her cheek as she brought her arms around my neck, going up on her toes to do so. I held her until she started to cry.

The emotion here made me tear up.

I absolutely love this two-shot. It's sweet, emotional, beautiful, and a bunch of other adjectives I can't think of right now.

I'm definitely going to read this again sometime in the near future.

Beautiful. Breathtaking. Mesmerizing.
Unforgettable.
I loved everything about this. Every word.
I'm stunned.
You have a lot of talent. I won't forget about this story. Honestly.

Moxie.
That was literally beautiful.
I don't even know what to say...

Zalsa, you're a genius. I was on the edge of my seat, laughing my head off, sniffling at others... I just... the plot itself is weaved perfectly, making the reader unable to guess what's going to happen next. In fact, the ending was so shocking... I couldn't believe it myself.

I love Adam, by the way. His sense of humor was the death of me.

XD I shall change the font then.
I was struggling to put it that small as well, but since it was late at night I told myself I would change it the next day. I'm glad someone read my mind.
Thank you so so so much anyway!! :D I'm really glad you liked it.

I had a hard time reading the story because the font was so small so maybe you could change that.. but that is just a suggestion.

Other than that, I liked this story.
It literally put me and the edge of my seat (good suspense factor) and I enjoyed reading it.

You're a good writer. :)