April 17th, 2010 at 11:27pm
Girrrl, I am so excited you finally posted this! And even though I already read it when you sent it to me, I read it again and still totally love it. I already have a sense that this story is going to be blunt, honest and thought provoking.
The paragraph about people thinking we have time to do things later and put them off is so completely true. True to practically everyone, probably, coupled with the fact that we also regret missed opportunities as you pointed out with the 'not answering a phone call' or 'not staying five more minutes'. I know I've done a lot of that in the past saying "I'll do it later" or whatever, because I keep thinking I'll still have a chance then.
I also really loved that line about as a child you always wish to be older because it seems like you can do much more, but it's really not all it's cracked up to be. And I, too, feel like the older you get, the quicker the days seem to pass you by because, when you're a kid, everything seems to move much slower. The line about holding onto your child seems to sum up where I'm at right now. It's such a true thing to say.
The only error I could see was when you wrote "even" as "EVen" so you might want to find that and change it. ;)
Other than that, this story sounds fucking amazing and I can't wait to read the rest. I feel like it's going to be one of my favourite stories from you because real life makes the best material to read about. I've subscribed to this for sure and can't wait till you update again!
I am so sorry you lost your father and I'm even sorrier that my condolences are on a comment page. The one thing that got me was when you're a kid, you always wish to be older because it seems like you can do more... that statement is so true. I remember when I was about five years old, felt like if only I was older, I could do more. But now that I'm 21, I see how quickly time goes by. People put things off because they think there's always more time.
This story is going to be epic. That's right, epic. And no writer can ever top a story that is just honest and from the heart in my opinion. I am going to subscribe for sure, and I have a feeling I'll be able to relate to this as other readers might as well. I really look forward to whenever you update this next love, it is going to be brilliant. <3