Bug Bite - Comments

First of all, some fangirling was inevitable, apparently.
And so is a long comment for a long and unfworthy one shot.

Your writing is exceptional!
I adore how you've written enough details for it to be an amazing story, but not bordering on overboard.
Also, I'm happy that it's not the cliched party!
It's a legit party, and not so cliched as to have people there that wouldn't normally be there.
I also like that you actually described that it was indeed a closet, and not a spare room. That there were actually hangers and clothes and that it was a small space.

Obviously I loved the closet scene. Immensely. My favorite part?

“Sh-shino…” I stuttered, only to get replied by a low growl.

“You’re so cute when you stutter...” I felt him lean forward, his breath once again caressing my exposed flesh.

I can just hear the husky tone he's got, and him saying that....unf.

Typos I caught:
I'll be addressing and correcting any typos I find, putting them in bold and correcting them.

For being a drunk kounoichi, Sakura was surprisingly fast. Let’s not talk about her inhuman strength.

She was by her closet, shouting a string of obscenities. Not even a fraction of a minute passed, before she approached me. Feeling very self conscious, under everyone’s prying eyes, I willingly headed towards the closet in haste.

It had a bug draw upon it… certainly; my luck couldn’t be that…-

Even more,would was I willing to kiss a boy?

I tried to control my breathing, concentratein on anything but the mysterious man in front of me.

Muffled voices resonated from outside the closet, but I immediately ignored them once Shino was done kissing me.

oh... my... -goes to re-read it again-.

Whoa. WHOAAA.
This is... just... -speechless-
Amazing, AMAZING job Chuey. Holy shit! :D WHOA! This is just so... unf.
You might've just turned me on.

And developed a serious lust for Shino.