Unnatural - Comments

Too. Awesome. And the icon.. Adds to the story :)

Now, I'm usually not into this. I couldn't help myself though. Your writing is flawless ♥

Dean didn’t mine these erratic movements because they gave him an enjoyable wave of pleasure.

This is the only mistake I could find that wasn't mentioned in the comments above.

I loved this, especially since it was Dean that was worried. Usually, it's Sam, and after a while that can get boring. Results should be up soon!

lol i dont blame you on the sex thing. ive gotten to that point in one of my stories and its reallt awkward for me. i really dont know how to go from there....
anyway.... i liked it!

awesome! lol. that's all i can say. lol. great job. very cool contest idea and entry. :D

It must have taken a banana load of Gorilla Glue to make Dean a pussy. ....Or, at the least, duct tape. Because duct tape is more seductive, for sure. Sooo, I hope you used that, instead.
ANYWAYS!

GRAMMAR BUST::

Dean kissed Sam’s Jaw line roughly,
WHY THE FUCK IS the 'J' in J]AW CAPILTALIZED?

fiddle with dean’s zipper
& Why is Dean not capitalized? xD

BUTTTT!
“Are you enjoying yourself, Sammy?”
YESYESYESYESYESYES!

<33333.

I wish it was less talking and more action, like I said before in a PRIVATEparts msg, but this was great. nonetheless. If you get past the terrible names 'Sam' and 'Dean'. XD

P.S. I bet you giggled at the word nipple. I know I did, son.