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  • D i s a s t e r ;

    D i s a s t e r ; (100)

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    Honestly, I love it. Great story line, amazing details, nice focus.
    Excellent work, hun. (:
    May 3rd, 2010 at 01:28am
  • Everspirit

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    I really like this story idea! Your doing a good job writing it too, which is a definite plus.
    May 2nd, 2010 at 02:21am
  • veloursunglasses

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    I like the prologue.
    April 25th, 2010 at 03:52am
  • fooleish

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    I like it. There's a few typos every so often, but I can live with that.
    It's interesting. I think I know where you're gonna take it, but I'm gonna keep reading to see if I get proved wrong.
    I'll definitely subscribe, though. :)
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:41pm
  • BeggingForChanges

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    Chapter Four:

    Much too short for my liking, but I liked it, just the same. I'm curious as to what exactly he said. Or why he said it, for that matter.
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:41pm
  • BeggingForChanges

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    Chapter Three:

    I actually am a huge Shakespeare fan. I've only read three of his plays at this oint (Romeo and Juliet, A Comedy of Errors, and Much Ado About Nothing)

    I believe the last of the three was the best, and I find Romeo and Juliet rather annoying. Just the plotline though.

    Again, I liked this chapter, and the flow was good. Again, a few small grammatical mistakes. Nothing major.
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:38pm
  • BeggingForChanges

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    Oops, I used to wrong form of "to" in my last commnt. I meant to put "too."
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:33pm
  • BeggingForChanges

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    Chapter Two:

    I liked it. There were some small grammatical errors, nothing to serious. Your flow wasn't goodin the beginning of the chapter, but it seemed to fix itself as the chapter continued.
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:32pm
  • BeggingForChanges

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    The first chapter is interesting. You haven't given much information on the main charcter yet, which is good. I find it nice that the story has a decent pace so far.
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:29pm
  • BeggingForChanges

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    The prolouge was absolutely amazing.

    I have no clue if that story is one you did find on the internet, or if you made it up, but it fit so perfectly with the narrator's comments.
    March 31st, 2010 at 11:26pm
  • ab1234

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    Love it so far! I can't wait to see what happens.
    :)
    March 15th, 2010 at 03:54am
  • ab1234

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    Eep! I'm stoked.
    :D
    March 12th, 2010 at 01:00pm
  • catgirl87

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    This looks interesting. I'm curious to see where you take this. Can't wait for more! :)
    March 11th, 2010 at 01:32pm
  • ab1234

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    I like the beginning! I can't wait for more.
    :)
    March 11th, 2010 at 02:08am