First of all, just so you know, the italics codes didn't work in the summer. (: But that's okay, I got what you were doing with it, haha.
Anyway. There were a couple small grammar mistakes. But nothing too big or too annoying that would make me not like or not want to read this entry. Because I did read it, from beginning to end, and I did like it. “Look...maybe, you’re too in over our heads here. Maybe this isn’t meant to be. ^It should say: "Maybe, WE'RE too in over our heads here." It was only a few things like that, or present/past tense issues. But other than that, it was really good. OH. And I REALLY loved The Littler Mermaid analogy. That was cute and made me smile. (: I also teared up at the end. Maybe it is because I have a relative in heaven now who left me a letter similar to that and I actually wrote a response, too. I'm not sure. But it's ironic and that really, REALLY made me want to cry. But in a good way. Your entry was the only one that made me tear up. (:
But that's okay, I got what you were doing with it, haha.
Anyway. There were a couple small grammar mistakes. But nothing too big or too annoying that would make me not like or not want to read this entry. Because I did read it, from beginning to end, and I did like it.
“Look...maybe, you’re too in over our heads here. Maybe this isn’t meant to be.
^It should say: "Maybe, WE'RE too in over our heads here."
It was only a few things like that, or present/past tense issues. But other than that, it was really good.
OH. And I REALLY loved The Littler Mermaid analogy. That was cute and made me smile. (:
I also teared up at the end. Maybe it is because I have a relative in heaven now who left me a letter similar to that and I actually wrote a response, too. I'm not sure. But it's ironic and that really, REALLY made me want to cry. But in a good way. Your entry was the only one that made me tear up. (:
Good luck in my contest!