Box Under the Bed - Comments

  • ALOTA

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    The person above me said it all (except falling in love with a Jeremy. I'm currently in love with an oddly named Otoniel— Oh-tone-ee-el. Sorry. I can't shut up about the jerk. xD)

    But in all seriousness now: I was first reading it and was thinking to myself, "This is kind of lame. Why would she ever write this to anyone?" But I read the second to last paragraph and my heart just stopped. I read it two more times and started crying and came to the realization that, "Ohmygod. He's dead!" Yes, I said that out loud. I couldn't force myself to think about how sad that was. Brilliant work.
    August 5th, 2011 at 10:25am
  • xamybellex

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    This was truly amazing, I swear. It was sad, but still had that little "I'm okay, though, even if I actually won't be for awhile." feeling to it. :)

    I was reading it and then you mentioned how he um.. passed away. That's when my heart really dropped. I was so disappointed, honestly heartbroken.

    This was a great piece of writing.

    The funny thing about this? The reason why I'm reading it, not only did your title interest me, but when I clicked on the summary, it was the title of the chapter. 'Jeremy.' The other day, I met this kid a year younger than me, named Jeremy. And even though I don't believe in love at first sight, I really did fall for him right then and there. I got his number, too, actually. :) We've been talking nonstop since then, and I've learned so much about him in the past week and three days than I've learned about my brother in all the thirteen years I've been alive.

    I really treasured the time I read this, because just of the fact that I also like a Jeremy made it just that much more real to me, even if it was just a little bit more real.

    I loved this, I really did.

    <3.
    Amy.
    July 24th, 2011 at 04:26am
  • krysnic1

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    That was great! Really heartbreaking. I entered this contest too, and after reading yours I feel a little less confident. lol
    March 26th, 2010 at 02:08am
  • Moonlit Midnight

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    You left me speechless. Good job. ~<3
    March 23rd, 2010 at 04:02pm