Pretty cool! Love it. One thing that I can think of that might make it better, if you wanted to, was elaborate a little more on some of the events, just like horsie 890 said. That's the only thing that I can think of. I loved it!!! =) It was very interesting. You could even turn this into a full-blown story if you wanted to, it posses great potential!
There's plenty of online programs that can check your spelling. If you get a Google account (like Gmail) you can use their Google Documents program to check your spelling and stuff. Very useful(;
Interesting short story by the way. I bet you could expand on this easily just by detailing more of the events. Instead of just having the character talk about the things happening, you could actually write out what happened. :mrgreen:
By the way to all readers...sorry for the grammer and spelling. My computer does not have a spell check!! Also, it was worded diff. when I wrote it, but to make sense I had to reword it some. Thats why its a bit messed up.