I Meant It - Comments

You're such a liar. Oh, sorry. Such a poet.

MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP I HATE YOU I LOVE THAT SO MUCH

I really liked this. You said you wrote it in ten minutes, but that jagged, unpolished quality really added tothe atmosphere of the story. The bitterness came across pretty well. I loved the line where he said Ryan was a liar and then corrected himself and said he was a poet. I thought that was so powerful and again, added to Brendon's bitterness.

I liked that these two characters were both relatively strong. (Ryan, not so much, but from what I gather, he usually doesn't come across so desperate and pathetic.) I loved it because there was really no tie keeping them together really, the outcome was really ambiguous. It felt as though they both didn't really care, but still couldn't imagine themselves with anyone else. I just found these characteristics were really interesting.

Story Review Game.
The moment I started reading this a Panic! song came on and I was like ha....

Now I'm not a person who reads fanfictions, mostly because I know the people and it's just awkward. But I did like this.
I love the second person narrative as well as the entire thing is Brendon bitching out Ryan.
It was full of angsty hate, but in a good way. Not the annoying way.

I just noticed the written in ten minutes thing, so to me it kind of seems like you were letting your own emotions out in that rant but just by changing the names and your gender. That was interesting.
I tend to write like everything fifteen twenty minutes and it's all just random spurts of thought.

Um, I'm going to do any grammar things real quick right now.
Frog in my throat and I clear it, take semi colon after it not a comma.

rearing it's ugly head., its not it's

That's it for that.

I hope you meant it when you said it, Ry. I really fucking do. Or I might just have to break your nose. love this line. It just made me laugh. So bitter anger.

Once again, an amazing story by Dru. Awesome job!

Ah, this is great!
And I lvoe the last line when he said something about breaking Ryan's nose. XD

New story.
~800 word oneshot.
I was mad, at like, five different people when I wrote this. One of them was me, two of them are in this story.
This actually just started out as a rant on LJ and turned into a fic.

Happy [?] reading!

xoxox
-Dru

Thank you to all reviewers in advance<333