August 8th, 2013 at 06:12am
You might not know who this is - and lucky for you if you don't because his writing gives me a headache - but the way you describe things reminds me so, so much of Nathaniel Hawthorne's, the author of The Scarlet Letter. Now, DO NOT think your writing gives me a headache. His does because it's set back in like the olden days where there are already all these confusing words to understand as far as what people wore and all the "thee" and "thou" shit. What I mean when I say you remind me of him, is your ability to describe things with so much depth is like, identical. It literally loses your reader, and that can be a bad thing if done the wrong way.
Lucky for you though - and not for him because he's annoying - your words are beautiful and they mesh together so well that you WANT your reader to get lost in them. That part about the kiss and Christian is touching his lips is like, my favorite line in the whole chapter. It's so....it's just gorgeous, woman! Extremely profound and just so well written.
Since I haven't actually read the whole story I can't give you anything as far as...well, that goes. I can just give you what I love about how you write. When someone writes very well, it's not really a big deal to not know what's going on in the story because you can focus on their writing as a whole. I could never, ever write like that. Maybe it's because you write in third person and I usually don't, but damn girl. I'd confuse myself if I ever tried stretching MY brain to the extent yours seems to fall effortlessly into!
You're brilliant and I for one, am impressed as well.
It leaves so many questions, so many places for my mind to wander.
You've captured the essence of Moulin Rouge, so to both of you who wrote this- My metaphorical hat is tipped to your success in writing this story.
I am truly amazed.