I really like this, and it's a crying shame that nobody else can be bothered to leave a comment. :grr: It really really really pisses me off that people will go and read garbage, but will overlook something because they don't know the writer, or they don't know the characters. It's a crying shame and it's something that really frustrates me. But I guess this is just like the pot calling the kettle black because I'm not exactly prompt with feedback, nor do I read much on the internet any more.
I thought this was a really original idea for a story and it's really good how you can interpret it in so many different ways - for instance, I saw them as assassins, and you said you'd written them as an angel and devil. It's really clever and I liked the open-ness of the story.
You wrote the Die/Toshiya really well too, by the way. Their relationship is only hinted at and is really subtle. It's obvious to see that the pair of them are really at-ease with each other and it's really sweet how they're just together.
I loved the ending so much. <3 “You coming my way?” “We’ll see.” I whisper softly, with a smile that says ‘yes’. It leaves a lot to the imagination, but at the same time the reader is able to picture the scene in their head and it's obvious that Toshiya is going to go Die's way.
I thought this was a really original idea for a story and it's really good how you can interpret it in so many different ways - for instance, I saw them as assassins, and you said you'd written them as an angel and devil. It's really clever and I liked the open-ness of the story.
You wrote the Die/Toshiya really well too, by the way. Their relationship is only hinted at and is really subtle. It's obvious to see that the pair of them are really at-ease with each other and it's really sweet how they're just together.
I loved the ending so much. <3 “You coming my way?” “We’ll see.” I whisper softly, with a smile that says ‘yes’. It leaves a lot to the imagination, but at the same time the reader is able to picture the scene in their head and it's obvious that Toshiya is going to go Die's way.
Great, great piece. I really enjoyed this. :)