Stars. - Comments

Okay, so I know this story is fairy old, but I've read it about six times now and I thought I really had to say how much I adore it.
It made me cry the first time, and I still feel my heart drop every time Alex says "Sorry I'm not normal, I'll try harder."
So, yeah. This has got to be one of my favourite one-shots ever.

i love it, its so sad at the same time as being epic :)
:( it is a lovely story though, everything was perfect-o! XD

To start off, I thought that the layout was very nice. The colors are very nice, and the banner is beautiful. The summary is very intriguing, you chose a good part to quote. And I must say that I love the disclaimer.

I love how you started it off with a character detail, and quite a unique one that already adds something to the character development of Alex. I like how you ended the second paragraph with... almost a mini cliffhanger in paragraph form, there's already a sense or urgency and I'm compelled to read on.

Hmm, so I'm getting the feel that Alex has some form of autism? To be honest, I've never known anyone well who actually has autism, although I have seen it before, and I must say that it's very well written in this story. If you don't know someone with autism, then it's obvious that you've done a lot of research on it. I also find how Jack tolerates (or doesn't tolerate) Alex to be extremely realistic, like how Jack told Alex not to hurt himself but was tired of saying it, knowing that it would do no good, and constantly thinking "he can't help it" as if those words keep him from lashing out.

This was Alex, this was always Alex. His brain worked differently, not wrong, just different.
Jack didn’t mind most days. Most.
I thought that these two lines pretty much summed up how Jack felt about living with Alex and being around him so often. Like I said, I don't personally know anyone with autism, but I can deftly relate to the feeling of finding someone tiring to be around, but at the same time really caring about them, and I thought that those feelings were executed wonderfully throughout the story.

Another thing that I'm liking is how the title ties in with the story subtly, and how you picked something like a little quirk for the title. It's small, but at the same time it doesn't feel random at all and I think that the title really fits.

“Why can’t you just be normal?”
Wow... the whole part where Jack was lashing out at Alex was very well written, and actually very heartbreaking. I can feel sympathy for both characters, especially once Jack realized what he's done. That one line, forever, was very emotional, and I feel for the characters so much. The only thing that I thought was a bit off was how "normal" was bolded, as I think it would look a bit better in italics. That's just personal preference though.

“It’s okay,” he murmured, voice quivering still, and leaned towards Jack.
“Sorry I’m not normal. I’ll try harder.”
If there's anything more heartbreaking than the previous line, it's these two. I think that I actually said "awww" aloud when I first read them. I love both Alex's and Jack's reactions to what happened, and I thought that they were very realistic. The dialog is very well-written, and I like how it reads almost like thoughts.

The ending was very cute, and I thought that it was perfect for this type of story. I also like how you kept it sweet, and overall I thought that this was gorgeous. I love your writing style, and you write emotions wonderfully.

Beautiful.
I cried.
You have amazing talent.

i cried because this was truly beautiful.

Woahh, this is really beautiful.
x

I thought this was beautifully written and very emotional. It seemed so realistic. At first I thought Alex was mildly autistic, but he's OCD, right? Reading this, I got the feeling you have first-hand knowledge or researched very well. This story is amazing.

yep!

you... are amazing.

This was amazing and cute.
It was well written and it flowed really well.
Good job.

I fucking love this. :)
I was upset because Jack lashed on Alex and when he said 'Why Can't you be normal.' I was like 'BAD JACK'

It was a upsetting moment for me ;(

I loved this though. It's amazing <3

LY BBY CAKES! (L)

This is a wonderful one-shot with pretty much perfect grammar and a completely "aww" worthy ending.

Autism is an interesting and fairly different thing to write about, and hard if you don't do a bit of research on it. However, you pulled it off wonderfully, and you did an amazing job at having Jack be extremely patient with Alex. Honestly, this has to now be one of my favorite one-shots. Being pretty close friends with a couple autistic kids makes this ridiculously relatable for me, especially the 'he can't help it' mantra. Exactly how I have to think at times when Bobby acts out. I can understand how Jack got angry and lashed out (I never have, but I've definitely wanted to a few times) and you played with my emotions pretty well.

I seriously hope you won/win your contest :D

Awhhh<3333
You did it again deary(:
This was amazing, fantastic, and adorable,
all smooshed into one(:
I was ready to cry and kill Jack when he hurt Alex. :(
But everything got better,
and I was "Awwhhing" the entire way trough(:
You did an amazing job<33333
xo,
Kristen

I loved this.:)