Okay, so I'll start by apologizing for taking forever to read it.
Now, I loved the idea. I didn't expect that at all, but I loved the idea. I loved the use of flashbacks. There were so many lines of the song that you managed to get in that I never would have thought of. Kudos to you for that. Uhm, what else? (If you hadn't noticed, I'm not exactly the best at this kind of thing) There were a few spelling, grammar and verb tense issues, but more likely than not, they won't hurt you. I just happen to notice small things that most people wouldn't.
Now, I loved the idea.
I didn't expect that at all, but I loved the idea.
I loved the use of flashbacks.
There were so many lines of the song that you managed to get in that I never would have thought of.
Kudos to you for that.
Uhm, what else? (If you hadn't noticed, I'm not exactly the best at this kind of thing)
There were a few spelling, grammar and verb tense issues, but more likely than not, they won't hurt you.
I just happen to notice small things that most people wouldn't.
Anyway. Great.
Good Luck!