February 10th, 2008 at 05:53pm
Opening Based on Devices and Desires - Comments
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I agree, it's like a memory.- guiltfeeder:
- Ooh, nice job. It's well-written and the description are great. Yeah like your first commenter said, it's like a news report but, it's like a... memory to me. Keep it up! ;)
It's well-written and informative.December 12th, 2007 at 02:54am -
Ooh, nice job. It's well-written and the description are great. Yeah like your first commenter said, it's like a news report but, it's like a... memory to me. Keep it up! ;)December 1st, 2007 at 07:41am
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oh ok, you wrote anymore stories or updates yet???November 30th, 2007 at 04:19pm
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chucked with my old english book. wasn't very good anyways as I thought it had no plot.November 30th, 2007 at 04:14pm
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wtf???
i get the first bit but not the bit on finding the middle road
av u put urs up on here yetNovember 30th, 2007 at 04:09pm -
still good though. I got told off because mine was too 'descriptive' read: macabra gore that should be rated R.lol. Its so hard to find the middle road...November 28th, 2007 at 08:58pm
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its ok, I probably should of explained it better in the description anywayNovember 21st, 2007 at 05:45pm
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Ah, I see. Never mind my rant than :PNovember 21st, 2007 at 06:15am
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i no that but its only an opening based on the book `devices and desires` by P.D.James and i wrote it in the exact style and the opening paragraph had hardly any emotions in. and i only did what my teacher saidNovember 16th, 2007 at 02:53am
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It’s good. Great descriptions and such, and it’s well written. But to me it feels more like a news report than a story. Personally I find it a bit dry if you know what I mean. It doesn’t really mediate any feelings. And because it’s so short I think that’s important. But I still think it was good :D.November 16th, 2007 at 02:18am