The True Meaning of Fidelity. - Comments

I love the story can't wait to read more I check on it everyday for updates...I know I'm an obssessed reader. lo, but I LOVE IT!

I love Candice <3

I loved the story though I really don't like vampire stories! :D Keep on going, I've got a good feeling about this :) )

-.-' Nothing was spelled wrong. If I misused a word because of a typo, that's a bit different. No misspells were in this one.

Couple of spelling mistakes, lovey. "Her and Emmett", "Hit's" when you meant 'It's", that sort of thing. And d*mn, but that's an ugly cat.

Keep up the good work. Can't wait for more :]

I've a couple of hints:
In the second chapter, you wrote this:
"Now, don't get him wrong, it's not that Edward minded his solitary lifestyle without a significant other, but the fact that everyone around him happened to have that other person was what really got to him."

Which serves its purpose by getting your point across, but it sounds like a large amount of slang and doesn't fit with the rest of your writing style in this.

Maybe you want to go back and try
"In all honesty, Edward did not mind his lack of a significant other, and rather enjoyed his solitary life. Yet the reality that everyone around him had someone, and he didn't, truly bothered him."

...or something. (It's just an idea. Your story, do what you will with it.)

Also, Chapter 3 has this one sentence that isn't quite WRONG...it just doesn't flow with the rest of the chapter...
" 'Out of the pot, into the fire...' He heard her think with a bitter inner laugh."

"he heard her think" seems...wrong. I just can't place it though.

My guess is that you're reverting to very casual speech/writing, which doesn't go quite right with Edward's character. (seeing as how you're doing a third person omniscient, via Edward's mind-reading stuff.)

perhaps it ought to be "he heard her silently say to herself." or something of the like.

and the whole thing with her just telling Edward about everything seems a bit out of character for Cadence/Cecille.
You might want to go back and have some of the details be Edward's power (gosh that sounded lame.) filling him in, and the readers by association.

Just some suggestions.
You also might want to go through and edit one more time.
there are a few typos, but just little stuff like "quick" instead of "quickly" and leaving out a word here.

All in all, not a bad story, and not a bad idea.

Write. More.
This story has my complete and utter attention.

Oh geez, this story seems like it's going to be filled with awsomesauce :D I cannot wait for more <3