Buttons. - Comments

Being the Coraline lover that I am, I thought this was wonderful. :3
And I agree with Spazzy McFlailpants., it was pretty suspenseful towards the end. (:
I enjoyed the lines about the birds; it made everything seem like it was all going to be perfect. But then the Other Mother showed up, and wanted to sew buttons for her eyes.
This is really fantastic, and you're a great writer. ^_^

I'll try come up with the best criticism that I can muster, seeing as that's what you want.
First, let me say that it was an amazing and very well done; some very good writing here with minor errors.
Now, let's get down to some concrit.

Okay, for grammar, there isn't much.

In paragraph one, I think that "The blankets were...." should be a new paragraph.

"More toys climbed out of a toy box, little cars, dancing dolls, stuffed animals that could fly or were on wheels." There should be a semicolon after box, not a comma.

Stuff I liked

I really liked the metal birds. "Golden birds that made tinkering noises as they moved flew and perched on the side of the bed." Was a great line, as was "They chirped, all gleaming with gold. I couldn’t help but smile brightly. They were like pieces of a dream I had had as a child."

This was also a great line about those birds: "The golden, mechanical birds chirped with delight, flitting over to me and quickly braiding my hair, surprisingly gentle for metal birds."

Criticism

I didn't quite understand the ending. I'm still not sure if she was dreaming, or really, what is going on. I have no idea why her mother's eyes are buttons, or if this is a nightmare, or.. anything. A little more clarity would be nice.

Another thing I didn't really get was if her mother was her best friend and all that, why was what she woke up to so... amazing? Was she abused, or something like that? That really wasn't quite clear.

Also, at the end, I don't get what the needle was for or any of that. I had no idea what was going on.

Overall

It wasn't too clear to me, and some background information within the story could definitely aid in making this easier to understand. Maybe I'm just dense, though.

Anyway, I think you have a great writing style and that this was a good story that others might understand a little easier than me.

You should be proud of your work.

wow! That was amazing Alice.
I don't really have any criticism, it flowed really nicely and I could see everything you described.
Amazing work :)

ALICE!

You even bigger tease!

Oh lord, at the end there, my heart was pounding. I got shivers! You lay the groundwork perfectly and then bam! You pull out the rug from underneath. It's brilliant, really. I loved the images, even the scary ones, and it all flowed seemlessly - which obviously worked well.

I love it and am afraid of it at the same time. XD