Furnace of the Paradox - Comments

I swear I love everything of yours I’ve read. You’re so clever with your ideas and your writing style is so nice and unique. I really loved your language choice and how well the sentences just seemed to knit together so seamlessly.

Story Review Game

What a mysterious and intriguing piece you have weaved here.

Right off the bat, this miss Lady A is such a likeable anti-hero to me in just attitude and personality and overall demeanor alone, seeing as very little (if any) is known about her past and history. She seems so…cynical and maybe disillusioned towards society. It makes me wonder how she got this way and what in her history turned her life down this path of habitual killing. I’m eager to learn more about her; about her past.

She’s smart. And I like that. She thinks on a completely different wavelength than everyone around her and I’m sure this is how she can continuously go through her fatal habits and remain free. She’s cunning and a planner and has a great acting ability. What can I say? I find her such an interesting character. You did fantastically with the characterization. The slightest off hand comments can add so much. Young lady, old accent. –See, there’s a lot there. And in the sentences after it. Is she stuck on something from the past? What is it from back then that appeals to her? She keeps me wanting to know more.

On a side note, for her ill-fated counterpart, I thought you did great with his dialogue. On top of Lady A’s negative feelings/descriptions, the realistic dialogue sealed the deal on my image of him.

Now, setting and time frame and all of that is so significant here. I feel like setting a story into the future gives both me as a reader and you as an author a great amount of room for our imaginations to wander. The story is in your hands…and with a futuristic universe for you to control, you can literally take it anywhere. In this story, you do not reveal all of the secrets of this new world (which is a very good thing) but rather, incorporate hints here and there in your descriptions of characters and their actions and use your set of “future” vocabulary, but sparingly. This gives me the freedom to imagine and come up with my own explanations for things. It’s good to give the reader that freedom. You have this world in your head, but to trap and confine the reader in a your own box wouldn’t be very beneficial.

"A handsome man, I know." she said bitterly, cutting over him. – Comma after “know.”

"Thank you. I never knew you cared." he said, without a trace of irony. – comma after “cared.” Also I love that whole bit. It’s like…as a kid and you’d claim it’s “opposite day” but someone would find a wise-ass way to mess it up. (I don’t know if that made sense.) That kind of frustration comes to mind to me.

"Please visit "The Restaurant at the End of the Universe" again, Lady Andromeda Mirabel." – I’ve always learned that when you have something to quote within the quote, just use ‘two of these like this.’ To make it less confusing on the eyes.
^On that quote as well, this is her real name, right? That’s what I got based on her kind of taken-aback reaction.

She was getting her husband back. – This is a very tricky sentence and I love it. It’s a bit of a head trip, since through this whole thing we’ve been assuming that she’s been killing off her husbands gladly and that this one seems to particularly set her off. So who is it that she’s getting back? Definitely a good way to keep readers guessing and wanting more.

Overall, like I said, a very mysterious and intriguing piece. I really have no idea where it’s going to end up. Wonderful work.

This is, indeed, an interesting piece of work.

I say interesting because I have no idea what to make of it. Also, because it interests me, obviously.

I like your overall style of writing. Just little things, catch my eye and make me smile. Such as, ahh, "microcolliod count" in relation to food. And the obvious Douglas Adams reference. The nerd in me is weeping for joy. Very much prose almost, but I expect no less from you, really.

So, indeed, who is Lady A? And who is her (real) husband? Curiouser and curiouser.