Dispite the really long chapters I actually made it! Chap 1: I like how its interesting from the start. that keeps readers attached. I like Dylans character! I love how he pops into the story when shes always running from Daemon. Chap 2: I was upset with the part about Dylan and Scar. I noticed that this chapter had a few errors like "And thats all that took it" doesnt really make sense. I <3 the fight part, its pretty good. Chap 3: I love how her first words were Dylan. That was pretty funny. I was shocked at the end of your chapter. That surprisingly was unexspected. Chap 4: Very original how you have Dylan talking from his point of view as a ghost...basically. lol Daemone was creepy at the end too. Dispite the really long chapters you manage to keep the reader focused. Chap5: This is a pretty short chapter. Overall Summary: The book was pretty good. You had a few errors such as the one I pointed out in chapter two. I would have stated them all but there were a lot of them. So I suggest you read over your work and check for errors. None of them are really anything to worry about, but if you want your work to be perfect, thats what you gotta do. Great job, besides.
Chap 1: I like how its interesting from the start. that keeps readers attached. I like Dylans character! I love how he pops into the story when shes always running from Daemon.
Chap 2: I was upset with the part about Dylan and Scar. I noticed that this chapter had a few errors like "And thats all that took it" doesnt really make sense. I <3 the fight part, its pretty good.
Chap 3: I love how her first words were Dylan. That was pretty funny. I was shocked at the end of your chapter. That surprisingly was unexspected.
Chap 4: Very original how you have Dylan talking from his point of view as a ghost...basically. lol Daemone was creepy at the end too. Dispite the really long chapters you manage to keep the reader focused.
Chap5: This is a pretty short chapter.
Overall Summary: The book was pretty good. You had a few errors such as the one I pointed out in chapter two. I would have stated them all but there were a lot of them. So I suggest you read over your work and check for errors. None of them are really anything to worry about, but if you want your work to be perfect, thats what you gotta do. Great job, besides.