First of all, thank you so much for entering this in my Supernatural contest. This was one of the best fics I've read in a while.
There's nothing bad I can say about this. It was perfectly written, the emotions were spot on at every turn and the description you lent to the story just made it so... real. Also, I think I was hooked the moment I read your Time metaphor.
I especially loved this line: Time was always breaking his heart, even though he always needed it. It's so astute and so very cynical that for a moment I had a thought that this was going to be about Dean. Which only made the last few lines that much more powerful because the changes in Sam are so far-reaching. Some subtle, some obvious.
And I really respect how you kept Sam's inner monologue, and even aspects of Ruby's, a continual factor in this, which can sometimes be difficult to do when writing in third person. For a second, it was like reading an extract from a lost episode of the show.
Excellent story. If you write another Supernatural fic even half as great as this one, I'll be the first to read it.
April 12th, 2010 at 07:21am
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There's nothing bad I can say about this. It was perfectly written, the emotions were spot on at every turn and the description you lent to the story just made it so... real. Also, I think I was hooked the moment I read your Time metaphor.
I especially loved this line: Time was always breaking his heart, even though he always needed it. It's so astute and so very cynical that for a moment I had a thought that this was going to be about Dean. Which only made the last few lines that much more powerful because the changes in Sam are so far-reaching. Some subtle, some obvious.
And I really respect how you kept Sam's inner monologue, and even aspects of Ruby's, a continual factor in this, which can sometimes be difficult to do when writing in third person. For a second, it was like reading an extract from a lost episode of the show.
Excellent story. If you write another Supernatural fic even half as great as this one, I'll be the first to read it.