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This was really sweet.
I loved the first paragraph because it flowed nicely while I was reading.
It felt like I was reading a poem!
Overall, you did a good job on this
xoxo

Wow, didn't know this would be that good. I love how you take something as simple as roses and make a beautiful story with it.

This was wonderful and I urge you to keep writing stories. One day it'll pay off!

I hope that you exist.

I think the background could have been a softer color to match the roses.
The story was beautiful.
The summary was lovely.
Short comment cos my hand hurts, ow. D:

I bow to such lovely writing skills. I am not worthy! It flows nicely, written well. So, nostalgic. So, beautiful.

This was such a beautiful story. I love the second person narration that you used and how you ended with a first person narration; it flows really nicely and adds a lot to that nostalgic feeling that you gave as you described that garden.

The plot is incredibly original, and I really have no criticism to give. It was genius.

really pretty!

This was adorable. I don't know... it just made me smile.

I'm not fond of second point of view... but I liked this. It was written very well.

Great job. c:

I adored that fact that at the beginning it was a man, and then at the end it changed into the woman. I loved the how your wrote this, it was so peaceful.

This was so beautifully brilliant. Amazing job.

I am glad you told said for me to read this story. It is wonderful. Absolutely amazing. =]

Though, everyone else covered that.

I think "brilliant" sums up this story. Very well written, I'd have to say, and one of the best things I've read lately.

As for the ending of it, I loved it. The way it changes is just perfect. Amazing job.

Nice, clean layout.
And a very clever story, the way it was written I mean.
Nice job with this.
The last few lines were awesome, really tied the knot.

Wow. This is one of the best things I've read in a long time. I love the fluidity, the emotions expressed, the anonymity, yet you feel as if youncan see the people...(wow does thatake any sense??) it seems like it's spoken from another much like the man, with their own rose bush, watching him pine for someone else when they wish he wod pick their rose and knock on their door, save them from their own he'll.... Magnificient job. :)

Great layout. I loved that last line, and the way you narrated it was beautiful.

Why, that was so lovely. I like how it was started in second person and ended in first.
You are a great writing.
Good job!
:)

This was really beautiful. I love the emotion you put into everything - and the ending is marvelous!
Great job! <3

Hey, I saw your journal and thought I'd check out a story =]

Let me say ... wow. I thought this was brilliant. It's one of the best one-shots I've read on here. I thought it was strange at the beginning, as I hadn't seen a story for ages which was written in the "you" format. But let me tell you, when I realized that it was a first person narrative at the end, I actually felt my stomach drop a little xD I thought it was absolutely excellent - breathtaking, even. It's just so beautiful, and so bittersweet. I actually love it.

I hope that you exist.

That actually made me fill up a little xD I just loved this. It was wonderful.

Story Review Game.

First of all, the layout is lovely.

Secondly, I’m going to review this as I read.

The first paragraph is really sweet. I love how you’ve explained all the different ways you can give someone a rose and how you’ve worded it, especially this bit: Sometimes you give three, for those three words you choose to say with flora.

In the next paragraph, I love the quote and the mention of Sherlock Holmes. It does help that I adore him, of course.

I like the way you introduce the second person, too. It seems really natural. I don’t quite know how to explain it, but it’s not like you’re repeatedly saying ‘you’ and making it sound like a ‘You’re the hero’ story… It makes sense in my head. XD

I absolutely adore this sentence: While on the soft ground, in your old clothes, the clothes that you can get dirty, digging hole and putting the roses in, your mind wandered., though I think you made a typo. It should say ‘digging holes’.

The next few paragraphs add a lot of mystery to the entire thing. I don’t know how, because I understand what’s happening, but it develops his (I’m presuming it’s a he) character to a kind of shyly obsessive person.

She wanted sunshine. I think that’s a really sweet line. I don’t have much else to say about it, but it’s just really lovely.

After you finished planting all the roses, watered them, and you changed to fresh clothes, you sit inside to think. No, to plan. That last sentence in there really brings out more of his character and makes him seem really… real. Again, it makes sense in my head.

She would be unfamiliar with the knock, but at the same time, she would know that she had heard it before, in her heart somewhere. When she will open the door, you will sweep her off her feet and bring her to your life with the rose garden, and the sunshine, and the moon, and songs. A life where all she does is take, and all you do is give, but that's more than enough for you because you love her. This entire paragraph is absolutely beautiful. I love it so much. The way you’ve written it is really lovely and somehow it seems like it’s the only way you could write it.

Oh my God. The last few sentences and the ‘change’ from second to first person is really amazing. I did NOT see that coming. It’s such a lovely way to round up the story and I really enjoyed it.

In response to your author’s note question, I think that the ‘you’ is like the man she fell in love with, but not the man she married, if that makes sense. The part of her husband that made her want to marry him, the part of him that gave her roses and sunshine and the moon and songs. It’s just my personal interpretation, but there could be so many different ones and that’s why this is so lovely.

:)

This was so beautiful.
I loved it, especially the ending.
It was just.... ahhh, just totally amazing.
<3

Awe, this was really sweet and the summary page looks beautiful. Good Luck !