First of all, I'd like to say thank you for entering my contest! Okay, now onto the critique:
I really love your writing style. It flows so well, and the words you chose just work so well with the subject matter. I like the little details that you've added throughout. It really adds to it. The only thing I have to say is that this story wasn't exactly very different from the original. Though little things were different, it was the same general concept, and I would have liked to see something a little more original. There were certain places where it seemed a little rushed, such as when she went to go buy that handgun. I did enjoy reading it, though, and, once again, your writing style is just lovely. One little thing, if you don't mind. Could you add a link to my contest in the summary? thanks!
Okay, now onto the critique:
I really love your writing style.
It flows so well, and the words you chose just work so well with the subject matter.
I like the little details that you've added throughout. It really adds to it.
The only thing I have to say is that this story wasn't exactly very different from the original.
Though little things were different, it was the same general concept, and I would have liked to see something a little more original.
There were certain places where it seemed a little rushed, such as when she went to go buy that handgun.
I did enjoy reading it, though, and, once again, your writing style is just lovely.
One little thing, if you don't mind. Could you add a link to my contest in the summary? thanks!
Thanks again for entering! Good luck!