The Aftermath of an Orgasm - Comments

XD Well, I didn't really know why he needs the sacrifices. The way I wrote it, it's like for some reason he just dies without them. Haha, I like yours better.

You're exactly right. ^^ I don't really know how they followed though. Perhaps they saw the glow of the magical forcefield thing. o.o

Mwhaha...most excellent. I'm pleased that how to portrayed Beku, as that was close to what I was going to have. My plan was to have him be the Alute's god, and they were giving him sacrifices so he would in return reward them with plentiful crops year 'round. Close enough though. I like how you made him a snake. ^^

One question though: Who's perspective does it switch into at that one part? Leboni, right? I'm a bit confused as to what happened with the five humans. So Leboni and Rave left them, but then the humans followed them to the camp anyway? Is that right?

I'm super exciting to write more! :D

AWESOME! Man, I totally don't want to get Beku wrong or anything. Ohh man. I'm so excited to start chapter three even though I'm going to ruin it. Haha.

One thing I should add however: Jan is male though I barely even hinted at it. It was perfectly logical to assume he was a dyke. XD

Kinky. X)

I will get right on the second chapter. *thumbs up*

Hahahaha! I love it! The preface is written like The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy almost. And the layout is beautiful.