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  • Slytherin

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    this reminds me of the concept of fight club :')
    love it very moving in a werid way
    February 21st, 2011 at 03:29am
  • alexander bernadotte

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    From a future psychologist's point of view, I'd say he's suffering from schizophrenia if the line between fantasy and reality for Jay is blurred or entirely not there...
    Jesus, sorry for the character diagnosis xD
    Anyhoo, like Oxy is brutal; said, I like how it ended with optimism. You don't see that very often. Lovely job! <3
    August 3rd, 2010 at 05:59pm
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    I really loved this. It was written so well. In the beginning it was so sad, but by the end I was smiling. It ended with optimism, which is always nice. Well done. :]
    May 6th, 2010 at 01:54pm
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    Sorry to comment twice, but since it won't let me edit, I have to.

    I wanted to add to the two above, that I don't think it really matters if Robyn was real or not. She did what she was supposed to, and the rest is up to matter of opinion!
    May 6th, 2010 at 02:23am
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    I love, love, LOVE the symbolism with Robyn's name and her entire role in this. Like an ethereal intervention (if you're excuse the comparison with your current view on the divine). It's what everyone hopes will happen with someone in that situation, I think.

    We all hope that that perfect person will materialize and say the exact right thing. And, sometimes it happens. Like in this story. Who knows, maybe this story was that person for someone.

    The happy ending's got me all giddy now! Great job!
    May 6th, 2010 at 02:22am
  • still a secret

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    Hey, I liked how it turned optimistic too! I agree with the commenter above that Robyn made me confused a bit, but in a good way! I thought she might have been a ghost. Haha. All in all, I liked this. :)
    April 30th, 2010 at 11:17am
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    Okay, so, I loved this(: I loved the way you incorporated Robyn, and how she explained to him what life's all about.
    I also like that Jay didn't have one of those angsty everyone-hates-me attitudes. I liked that he could admit he was bored with life, and that it wasn't okay with him.
    I ended up being very confused about Robyn, though. As in, was she real? Or was she all in his head?

    I also loved--
    It took me a long time to realize that there was no blonde-haired, blue-eyed girl named Robyn in my school. I never did spot her again for ages. Sometimes, I wondered if she had even been there at all. But every so often, when I have a bad day, when fear or sadness takes me over, I’ll catch a flash of blonde hair, and I’ll remember the words that changed my life.

    That was my favorite bit. (:

    I think I saw one typo, where the BBCode was messed up, but, other than that, it was el perfecto.(:(:(:(:
    April 30th, 2010 at 04:38am
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