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  • Perfect Weapon

    Perfect Weapon (100)

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    I love kingdom hearts. This story is AMAZING so far!
    I love it!
    May 9th, 2010 at 04:41pm
  • the fallen.

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    Twitch This was a really good second chapter.

    He laid back down on the bed, his head propped up from the pillows. Roxas rolled over, taking a pillow away from his makeshift headrest, the pillow in front laying flat. He laid down on the pillow, staring up at the ceiling, the movie still on his mind, as well as the amused chuckle he heard near the mirror. What was that? he pondered, turning towards the mirror.

    He saw himself, laying back on the bed, his gaze one of confusion. A speck of red, a bright obnoxious red, showed itself behind him. Roxas turned around to where it was, but nothing was behind him. He got up and turned the light on before turning his attention back to the mirror, moving to sit on the edge of the bed to get a closer look.

    Hairs on the back of his neck stood on end, as he saw a lump of black leather laying on his bed in the mirror, tufts of red at the head of the lump. It looked like a person laying there, but when he turned around to look at his bed, no one was there. The lump moved, and Roxas jumped back, moving to the side of the bed.

    It rolled over, and wild green eyes stared back at him, a smirk placed on what were the lips of the man laying there. "That movie was boring," he stated, his head propped up by his hand. "Why you got so scared I'll never know." An amused smile dissolved onto his mouth.


    I'm like dead serious, this part scared the shit outta me. lmfao
    Woot, I love it so far!!
    May 7th, 2010 at 02:17am
  • the fallen.

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    OH MY GOD!
    This is so good.
    Best part, right here:
    "I give up then," he said, shaking his head. "If you want to live here, then fine. But if evil ghosts or monsters come at you late at night I'm not going to come up here and get you." He paused. "I'm going to call the Ghostbusters Hotline and let them handle it, telling the fictional characters to tell his best friend Roxas 'I told you so' for him."

    lmfao That was gold.
    Cannot wait for the next chapter!
    May 4th, 2010 at 05:38pm
  • Wheat_thin_addict

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    that was awesome. i've been a huge fan of kingdom hearts and you did an amazing job.
    May 3rd, 2010 at 10:46pm