Behind Every Great Man - Comments

  • XSoulXLoverX

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    The first thing that attracted me to this story was the fact that it was a hockey fan fiction. I a huge hockey fan so right off the bat or should I say puck (lame joke!) I wanted to read this. It also helped that it was on Patrick Kane who I simply adore. I knew I couldn't let this story fall out of my grip. I loved the layout. I thought the picture was great and I also really liked the colors you used they were really awesome and really easy to read.

    I liked how you opened up your story because it was really well thought out. I liked how things were subtle but very powerful as well. Everything was done in this slow, suave manner and I liked that. It had style and elegance and I don't see that much in a story, especially for such a simple task. I liked how you described what was happening and how the flow went throughout the story. I thought in one paragraph you accomplished so much already and I thought that was simply amazing. I really liked that a lot and thought it was a real punch to the story. I couldn't wait to keep reading on, I was excited and happy to keep on reading.

    I loved how you described the scene when he entered the bathroom; I thought it was really well thought out. I liked how you made everything flow beautifully and everything so magical. I loved how delicate the writing of the story was; I thought it was really cute and adorable. I also liked how you implied that he was getting "excited" it was done in such a cute and innocent way that it made me like the story even more.

    I loved their interaction at the start of the story; I thought it was so cute and so fluffy. I love fluff. I believed it so much and it just seemed so natural. I loved the scene and how it was played out. I loved how they were with each other and it felt like they were in love. That's an important thing, to believe their love and I did believe it. I thought it was so adorable and I loved that. The way they spoke to each other was like they truly existed as a couple and I think that's just really awesome. I thought that it was so cute and I adored their first conversation. I also like where the conversation was leading up to. I also liked how you described the part where they were going to have sex, usually I would expect more details but in this story that way it was described was just perfect. It didn't need more detail on that aspect at all.

    The moment where she said she was pregnant came as a total shock and I liked being surprised when reading a story. I think it's really cool and it makes me enjoy the story that much more. I also thought however that it came off a little too fast. I wished there was just a little bit more development to that point of the story. I also thought that it felt rushed and kind of passed on too fast and I wished that there was a little bit more to it. A reaction from Patrick would have been nice as well.
    I thought that time jump was super quick, and I wished there was more about her during her actual pregnancy, just to see how things went. I wanted to see a little bit more development there because I thought it would have added something more to the story. I thought that it would have given it something a little more interesting to go back on before reading on.

    What I did like about the time jump, was that we got to see her children actually being older and having them as characters throughout the story. I liked how the brother and sister acted with the other. It was really cute and it felt like a real brother and sister, so I liked that a lot. I thought it was really cool and really well written. I liked that aspect of it a lot.

    Alice was simply the cutest; she was like the daughter anyone would want. I loved how she was daddy's little girl and I loved how you brought her out to the reader. That was just adorable and I thought you did an excellent job there, I loved the way she was and how she talked. She was adorable and I loved how Patrick and Angel interacted with her. I thought that she was a really beautiful addition to the story.

    I also really liked Noah; I thought that he added something to the story too. He was a little bugger, and brothers just love to blame their sisters now don't they? I liked Noah a lot too and he was so cute and I wished they were real. I really did. I also loved the addition of the third son in the mix and how he was already liking someone and being so young. I really liked that addition to the story; it made the story so cute and so loveable.
    I liked that you incorporated how they met, I thought it was really cute and it gave me a better understanding of what their relationship was like. I also really liked that they had triplets and that Patrick wanted more, I thought that was damn cute.

    I thought the ending was just magical, and I think it could be a full length story without a doubt. I loved the plot line and I thought that the ending captured everything I could have wanted. It was so cute and so magical and it went really well with the title of the story as well. I loved how they were with each other and it was such a great relationship.

    I adored this story! :D It was amazing! You should be really proud of this story.
    July 18th, 2011 at 06:52pm
  • little miss 19 toews

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    awwwwwww!!!! how did i ever miss this story?!
    it is AHHHHDORABLE!!
    November 29th, 2010 at 03:16am
  • Evgeni Malkin

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    i agree with them ^^^ make a story of it ;) perhaps how they actually met/ fell in love.

    ;) ;) ;) ahah ove you twin
    May 17th, 2010 at 10:48pm
  • nik-x

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    That was really sweet :) Very well written and totally amazing!
    May 11th, 2010 at 08:45pm
  • Natural.Disaster.

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    That was too cute lol :)
    and I agree with ballerina19 on making a story based on it.
    May 11th, 2010 at 01:00am
  • han_

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    This was adorable! You should think about having a story based off of it(:
    May 9th, 2010 at 07:26pm
  • Evgeni Malkin

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    Gahhh! i loved it.
    love love love love love love love <3
    you are amazing, twin, and i love my 'kids' too hahah :)
    it was awesomeee and i hope you win that contest!!! :D
    May 8th, 2010 at 05:30pm