You Gave Me Your Life. I Give You Mine. - Comments

  • CaesarSalad

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    For starters, before I start reading this, I'm not too fond of backgrounds that repeat but don't connect into one big picture. That's just me. Anyways, onto reading the story.

    That was sweet and adorable. I love the way you went from her point of view to his, the changing of text colors. That was a good idea. Instead of writing so-and-so's point of view every time you changed point of views. My favorite part would most definitely have to be the end. Makes me want a reunion. Maybe years later or something along those lines. Once again you did a great job at writing an epic piece and I applaud you for that.
    September 29th, 2012 at 10:17pm
  • Kiakara17

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    I started reading this and was hooked. I love how this was extremely descriptive. By the way, keep in mind of the point if view change, it could confuse a reader, but over all this is amazing. I couldn't keep my eyes off it. Too bad this is a one-shot.
    June 6th, 2012 at 12:51am
  • Patty Lovell

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    Ugh! This was amazing! After it was finished, I still wanted more. It was very well written, and I didn't see many errors in there.
    July 5th, 2010 at 02:06am
  • Blue Eyes White Lies

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    Holy shit.
    That was kinda sorta amazingly beautiful.
    I wish you'd post more, damn one-shots):
    June 28th, 2010 at 05:22am
  • Blue Eyes White Lies

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    Holy shit.
    That was kinda sorta amazingly beautiful.
    I wish you'd post more, damn one-shots):
    June 28th, 2010 at 05:21am
  • Blue Eyes White Lies

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    Holy shit.
    That was kinda sorta amazingly beautiful.
    I wish you'd post more, damn one-shots):
    June 28th, 2010 at 05:21am