Nothing Left Now. - Comments

I think that just got me a little emotional, and for the sake of you knowing, I never get emotional over stories. What amazing descriptions you have especially at the end where the story just subsided to whole new aspect. I'm a huge fan of lots and lots of description and often I feel people just dont add enough of it, and so this, this was merely a piece of genuise. The way you describe the characters sorrow, his pain and almost frustration to his situation, how his thought proccess was going wild and he just questioned his every move. It was lovely. Sad, but lovely. I really liked it, so thumbs up to you =)

Good God. Just... I don't even... I'm having such a hard time not crying. That was so terribly sad.
In the beginning, I was just enjoying a pleasant read. Very nice imagery, especially when he was walking around his place. That part was just narrated so well. I adored it. I could relate to how he was feeling when he found that his boyfriend had left, because that would be exactly how I would feel if my girlfriend disappeared on me. You described it perfectly, causing my heart to ache for him. I wanted to hug him and tell him that it would be okay, but I couldn't.

Then, by the time I realized he was going to die, my heart sunk completely. I didn't want it to end that way, but I know that that's how a lot of real people end their lives. They lose someone they think they just can't live without, and it feels as if any and all hope is gone. So they give up. And it's so terrible to think about, and this story just really got to me. It was so amazing though. Such a masterpiece. Every emotion was portrayed perfectly, and every action was so clear. It was amazing, and it's just one of those things that makes you want to help someone, and it also reminds you that you shouldn't take anyone for granted. Honestly, I really needed that myself. So thank you. And I applaud you for writing this. <3

I was in tears by the end of this :'c
I loved the layout though. It was amazing :3
You had so much emotion, it was like I could feel them myself.
Great work darling :3

I'm crying. D:<

Nah, but I absolutely adored this.
It was sad, raw, and completely beautiful.
I really wish I could say more right now, you don't even know, but I'm speechless.

I'll never be able to listen to Rocket Man the same as before.

The layout and banner were also very pretty.

Amazing, amazing job.

You know I have never managed to finish a love-story-slash-suicide story before, I haven't, this is the first time I have. I just couldn't stop reading, I will honestly admit, I was going to at the beginning, then I just couldn't, the story drew me in.

It was so sad, and very raw, I would cry if I were the sensitive type.
I just found one, teeny, mistake, I thought I'd point it out.
"You were gone. I laid down on your side of the bed, you scent still on those pillows.."
You wrote "..you scent still on those pillows"

It should be "..your.." That's absolutely it, I didn't find any other mistake,
Oh by the way, I think this is the longest comment I've ever written for a story, since it takes quite a bit to impress me and get me to comment like this.
Beautiful job, although I'm sure you've heard that countless times.

First look:
I love the layout (: the stars and the picture. Looks interesting!!

While reading:
I liked the characters, especially Wes' for his love of Disney movies X3 plus, Rocketman is also a good song (:

The quiet scares scares me. This reminded me of a song "the quiet scares me, because it screams the truth. for some reason, I could connect it with this story

You describe everything very well and I could feel the emotion. There were a few minor mistake like using "you" instead of "your" and spelling errors, but nothing bad.

Overall:
This was fantastic. I really liked how you wrote this story. For a sequel, I would suggest doing something with Wes, like having him find out about the death of his ex and how he reacts to this. OR maybe something with his funeral. Those are some ideas to throw around (:

For the comment swap, could you read Close You Eyes? It's a good few chapters so I don't want to be fair and ask for another story comment but if you feel like it, I also have a oneshot The Music Box but that's only if you feel like reading it.

love this layout! <33 it's really pretty :)
I like your way of explaining things
all the things this person misses about the other, it's kind of touching
I love that he/she notices even the little dfferences now that the other is gone
I find it kind of sad, because I'm not sure why the other person is gone though.
Aww, the note :( kind of sad, but he deserves it if Wes is saying that to him
By the way, love the name Declan very much :)
Declan seems like he has really strong feelings for Wes,
the way he's trying to get over him, and his actions
Now, he goes and gets some drugs. the exact reason he left him in the first place
Such a sad ending, he killed himself, that's not the way to solve it Declan :(
I really loved this and your way of writing, it was beautiful
It felt like a really knew Declan and Wes :)

This was awesome. I know you really wanted to write a sequel, but you totally don't need it. I feel like even though there may be things left unsaid, but still. Life always has a million things left unsaid, so why try and sum it all up? I loved it, though. I think adding more may ruin the emotion in it.

Also, in the second paragraph, it should be whether not weather. ;)

Um, what the hell? How are you this good at writing? xD I loved it. Every word, every sentence. It was pure amazing.

You jacket wasn’t hanging over arm of the couch. I think you mean, your. ^_^

That letter she wrote, just broke my heart. And everything about this just shattered my heart. I love the last line, as well.

It's like I was there, living in the moment. This was lovely.

First, I absolutely love the banner and the layout. Both are so pretty. Second, I loved this so much. It was so sad; I also thought it was going to have sex with the drug dealer. I honestly didn't expect him to kill himself D: The descriptions and everything else about this were amazing (:
Lovely job! <3

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This is amazing! But so emotional and deep, too. I love how you described everything, and how you would sometimes change the perspective a bit. This was amazing!

This was very good. Not only did you capture the emotions of a breakup and make the emotions of your character realistic. You also gave him relationships and were able to make them complex in a very short amount of space.

Then, when the character took his own life, it wasn't just, "And then I killed myself." You gave it more depth. There was reason to it; reason that is relatable to most people. You gave someone we all only get to meet for a very short time a back story, a life, their own problems, and their own ways of dealing with things.

I thought this was very good.

Light flickered above me, bathing me in pale yellow light.

I don't think you should repeat "light". I'm not sure how to fix that, but...I don't know. It's not very welcoming when the first sentence repeats words. /a-holishconcrit

The rest of that paragraph, though, was brilliant. Well done.

It’s like you were never here.

Here should be there. It's told in past-tense.

I ran my hands through my raven colored hair.

I'm terribly sorry, but I don't think the main character should be thinking about his hair color. Maybe if he was looking in a mirror?

and my sunken in dark eyes.

Again, don't let your MC describe himself!

The rest was just utterly sad. I nearly cried...it was beautiful.

You're an awesome writer. Don't ever, ever stop.

Dr.

The layout is beautiful, I adore it (:
There was a couple grammar errors but nothing big, it happens to all of us, we make mistakes.
Like in certain parts you would put "You" even though it was suppose to be your, you just forgot the R ;p. nothing major though.
while we watched Aladdin for the millionth time. - I love Aladdin <3
Jesus, this was just so amazingly written, it's not even funny.
Probably one of the greatest one-shots I've read.. I'm seriously jealous.
I wish I was able to write like you, so descriptive and just wonderfully.

and man, this story got to me too.
As soon as I was reading the last few paragraphs, my eyes got all watery.
So sad, but just beautiful.
<3

Holy mother of God, this was amazing. Really. Your writing, the plot, the characters, all of it. The layout was fantastic, as well. I saw how long at was and was kind of dreading it, I must admit, but once I got into it I couldn't stop. This was one of the best one-shots I've read, I'm not lying.

The only criticism I have is some grammatical errors. Like, you spelled weather when it should have been whether, stuff like that. Nothing major. I would go back and fix those, though, if you can.

Otherwise, BRILLIANT!!! I'm blown away!

I have a tear threatening to fall in my eye. Why? Why did you have to come to suicide? *Tear falls.* Any ways...The layout, the picture, the story was magnificent. This was so realistic also, because...well let's face it, what people would do for love, am I correct?

I'm sure many people can relate to this-the break up letter, and in some cases, because of drugs, or bad habits. Once again, magnificent.

That was upseting. D:
Your character was so 3D it was unreal. :D
You really potrayed the emotions so well.
Great job. <3
I love this!

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Beautifully written, I must say. Very deep and easy to picture in my mind. Quite the tear-jerker, and I love me some of those. :] Oh, and Rocket Man is one of man's best creations -- gotta love that song.

Fair winds,
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