I love the photo you've used. I was in a pageant once but I guess that because I didn't smile my mom decided to never put me back in one. I think I got runner up or something? That was good enough for me haha. But the piece is written nicely, there were a few spelling errors here and there. I like the idea you have, that her need to be perfect on stage is effecting her mentally and physically with the anorexia and what not. It's interesting to see what cuases such things. However, there were quite a few parts where I felt that there could've been a little bit more. Otherwise, nice job. :]
December 29th, 2011 at 10:48pm